Narration: Decent and immersive
Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed
Character development: Nice and steady
Character design: Outstanding
Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike
Pacing: Not fast nor too slow
Writing quality: Magnificent
Execution of the Genre: Good pitch
Story potential: High
Updating Stability: Steady
This is my review! Hope you like it! 😉
4 years ago
3
Tolinie_Williams_4092
Fantastic work by the author. I hope they will continue on this wonderful journey as a author. The only true issue I have is the fact that the story is too slow. Otherwise keep it up
4 years ago
3
ihatepower_45
shameless author he reviewing my work with five star.
Is this truly worth a five, no but I hope I can make it worth a ten out of five stars.
4 years ago
3
Mollysun
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4 years ago
1
SEP1A
This is an explosive story with action everywhere you turn! Unravelling every step you take, the author has magnificently constructed a castle of a tale that spirals into the clouds. Great work!
4 years ago
0
A_lucid_Dreamer
So far I think Story is Very likeable. I Like the characters relationship between leo puppatier. All the characters of the FloCk are orginal. OnlY thinG thaT needs tO be added is More workD building.
4 years ago
0
_hestia_
very pretty cover. The flow of dialogue is smooth, and the authors control over the characters in enviable. I do feel like the synopsis could have been more detailed
4 years ago
0
ghjgyugf
I loved the fantasy-magical theme of the novel the imagination of the writter is wide and Amazing the flow of story was good but there were few Petty mistakes breaking the flaw of the novel like - punctuation mistakes, typography, grammatical errors but if the author works on these things nothing can stop this novel from rocking on.
a little cheer up dance for my author
best of luck
4 years ago
0
Aevitas
It has an interesting premise with the mc being a deal with the devil type character. The cover art looks amazing as well. The only problem I had with it was the grammar making it a bit hard to read.
4 years ago
0
ArnolDadi
Impressed by the way, the author put the tory together. Although there are grammatical errors, it's passable and everything else flows smoothly. [img=faceslap][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
4 years ago
0
Nullabutton
This reads very much like a screenplay. I'd like to see author expands and add more than actions and dialogues.
Plot is intriguing and characters are interesting enough. The battle scene is exciting. Epic, I dare say. The story's got a huge potential. So, a bit more muscle on the bone, and this would rake in stars and readers.
4 years ago
0
silent_walker
I can see that the author tried his best to make it epic. There's nice worldbuilding, though I would like it if you stretched that more.
The main problem is stretching... your story looked too easy... stretch it, make ot more difficult and make it as believable as possible.
There are quite a few grammatical errors... you should solve them asap, especially the punctuations.
The writing style is easy on the eye with a bit of fixing it would be even more promising...
Good luck... Author.
4 years ago
0
meixiaolian
Join the FLOCK group! Synopsis is great, short but intriguing. Like how the author name the characters, the world building is great too. The author's narration is great to let the readers imagine the setting. Haven't across a novel that is has a lot of adventures. Give this book a try.
4 years ago
0
JustLikeWriting777
Read the first chapters and i am intrigued- the writer did an excellent job to get a reader hooked right into the story. The plot caught my eye and I am curious about the main characters. I think this was a great read!
4 years ago
0
Sonder_Ella
I jumped into this with no expectations, and was greatly surprised honestly. It's a very intriguing start for the story, and I'm more than curious to read what happens next. Honestly, AMAZING job!!
Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady This is my review! Hope you like it! 😉
Fantastic work by the author. I hope they will continue on this wonderful journey as a author. The only true issue I have is the fact that the story is too slow. Otherwise keep it up
shameless author he reviewing my work with five star. Is this truly worth a five, no but I hope I can make it worth a ten out of five stars.
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels! + Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing contest! This contest is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi, but if you haven’t worked on these genres, that’s TOTALLY FINE! You can refer to the given examples and tips to develop a new story. As all new stories can get cash rewards, this might be your chance to begin your writing career and start to make a living by writing! Not to mention that you can take your chance to win the big cash and get your books published in hardcover! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/3tBG7l7 or contact Rebecca_661@outlook.com
This is an explosive story with action everywhere you turn! Unravelling every step you take, the author has magnificently constructed a castle of a tale that spirals into the clouds. Great work!
So far I think Story is Very likeable. I Like the characters relationship between leo puppatier. All the characters of the FloCk are orginal. OnlY thinG thaT needs tO be added is More workD building.
very pretty cover. The flow of dialogue is smooth, and the authors control over the characters in enviable. I do feel like the synopsis could have been more detailed
I loved the fantasy-magical theme of the novel the imagination of the writter is wide and Amazing the flow of story was good but there were few Petty mistakes breaking the flaw of the novel like - punctuation mistakes, typography, grammatical errors but if the author works on these things nothing can stop this novel from rocking on. a little cheer up dance for my author best of luck
It has an interesting premise with the mc being a deal with the devil type character. The cover art looks amazing as well. The only problem I had with it was the grammar making it a bit hard to read.
Impressed by the way, the author put the tory together. Although there are grammatical errors, it's passable and everything else flows smoothly. [img=faceslap][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
This reads very much like a screenplay. I'd like to see author expands and add more than actions and dialogues. Plot is intriguing and characters are interesting enough. The battle scene is exciting. Epic, I dare say. The story's got a huge potential. So, a bit more muscle on the bone, and this would rake in stars and readers.
I can see that the author tried his best to make it epic. There's nice worldbuilding, though I would like it if you stretched that more. The main problem is stretching... your story looked too easy... stretch it, make ot more difficult and make it as believable as possible. There are quite a few grammatical errors... you should solve them asap, especially the punctuations. The writing style is easy on the eye with a bit of fixing it would be even more promising... Good luck... Author.
Join the FLOCK group! Synopsis is great, short but intriguing. Like how the author name the characters, the world building is great too. The author's narration is great to let the readers imagine the setting. Haven't across a novel that is has a lot of adventures. Give this book a try.
Read the first chapters and i am intrigued- the writer did an excellent job to get a reader hooked right into the story. The plot caught my eye and I am curious about the main characters. I think this was a great read!
I jumped into this with no expectations, and was greatly surprised honestly. It's a very intriguing start for the story, and I'm more than curious to read what happens next. Honestly, AMAZING job!!