Fate Past Heaven

why does Archer's behavior ( the one who is inhabiting his younger self) is so pathetic, the archer we know is sarcastic and brave compare to how he is here, is so unlikely of him and that make him looks pathetic, hope you can change it, tq

the grammar might need some work because it kind of sucked

So where to begin? From your writing I can see you are a fairly new to writing, the story is cliche and well a bit badly developed. But it's interesting to read. The real review I will give this fic is 3 stars. But I am giving 5 stars to boost your morale, I hope you can improve your writing skills and publish good and interesting stories one day. Don't worry everyone stars like this, you will soon get a lot of hate and heavy criticism as well. It's okay to get angry from them, afterall you are a human, but well important thing is you preserve. Even if someone says to stop writing, if you feel like to continue writing then don't listen to them.

Grammar : Good - Five StarPlot Story : Good - Five StarCharacter Design : Good - Five StarUpdate : Good - Five StarWorld background : Good - Five Star-Everything Is good, I give this novel five star and don't forget to read my novel to, thank you.

É uma história muito boa. 👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀👀