What would you do if a pigeon told you that you had to save the world? This is what happened to Legend, a ten year old kid that was originally a seventeen year old named Jonas. Now he's in another dimension called the Arkana, and after accepting his new reality he's become a wannabe adventurer.
After meeting new friends along the way, they uncover an evil conspiracy to open a dimensional doorway allowing something unholy into the Arkana. Will Legend and his new friends be able to stop those that long to see the world burn?
The story advances smoothly pleasing. Your writing style is simple yet effective. The characters are decently crafted and the setting has that magical feeling that you can always expect but not always get in this genre. However, the way the narrator works is confusing and some might find it tiresome. It acts like it's in the Third-Person most of the time but sometimes it's like a First-Person. The way it talks to the reader can also be just, "weird". Some grammar mistakes but nothing that kills the experience. Try fixing the way you mix the grammatical tenses. And please get rid of those dialogues in the script format: A: Hi. B: Hello. They are tedious to read and limit creativity, especially the way you inconsistently switch between them and the standard quotation marks. Otherwise, it's a solid, light-hearted work. Keep improving it and don't stop.
I've only read up to fourteen chapters, but so far it seems good. Not going to lie, when I read the first couple of sentences, it honestly was a turn off for me. I blame every other novel where they use the reincarnation trope and make the whole genre trash. However, this story surprised me and made me want to know more. I love where it's going so far, and I hope the author receives the attention it deserves for this story.
The story flows wonderfully. The characters are very likable and comedic. The authors use of language is excellent and the world built around these characters is very interesting. Great action scenes, a very fun read. Keep it up for sure
The story is very smooth flowing and easy to read. Loved the beginning. The chemistry of the main character with the others feels nice and convincing. Will have to wait and see about the world-building aspects. The plot seems deep. Nice work bro
With a solid development of the main character and convincing backstory, this story begins convincingly. Well done! I good read! Especially as it is fantasy based!
A story is full of action and comedy. You have adapted each character very adequately and the dialogue of each character suits everyone well. The world background is very well contrived. I like the story very much especially 'Meg' Legend's best partner, I felt (hehehe). I thought it would be more fun if you didn't write every chapter as a conversation [solely my thinking]. Maybe others will like it the way you wrote it. Good luck in the future.
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I've really enjoyed writing this story! If you like fantasy, mystery and a hint of comedy, this is definitely for you... It's the greatest unintentional adventure with repercussions that go above and beyond dimensions! There is a main character that we follow from the beginning, but several have a protagonist role (giving you a chance to love or hate them, to choose your favorites as well!). I appreciate all your reviews! I'd also love to encourage you to comment on the chapters as well... it helps motivate me to keep going!
A very good story, I for one love martial arts and adventure. The grammar is very good and characters are interesting, the plot as well. Everything is very good. Good Job 💯 don't lose the motivation to write I'm cheering you on. 💯
I'm reading this book since days ago; I'm impressed with the plot and characters! I can't wait to read more!and I recommend this to everyone!keep going author!you are doing well!
An action packed story of heroes fighting a great evil, in a unique, other-worldly setting. With magic and creatures, it practically makes the possibilities endless, in terms for the story to proceed.
The story is well written with good pacing throughout with an interesting premise and awesome characters, who, at times, do get a little hazy, but overall, the story's good.
Good stuff right here. It has a good world, good characters and also good development, honestly I haven't read it all just making a small pause to leave a review, before I proceed to keep on reading! Keep it going, Author!
I'm new on webnovel and this is One of the best books I have read on here... Definitely one I would like to keep following... Added to library 😁 .