King of the east universe

This story has potential by the way. But at least make it more lengthy or don't come short below 800 words. I recommend it to have between 1.5 to 800 words to make the flow of the story to be slower and its pacing will improve. What I do to mine was don't fall on 1000 words. But hey! your story is so awesome! A big wave of readers will come for your novel in the future!

Don't stop writing, you can do it. Don't stop expressing, or you'll dull the skill. Don't stop improving, writer fever makes us ill. Don't stop having fun, story must be told and seen.

I like the book and I also feel connected to the characters the world-building also make me feel like I am there when I read the book I enjoy it

I think the story definitely has potential. I can see the world and the characters been built. I would just suggest the use of more paragraphs and punctuation to improve the flow of the story. But overall good job. Keep at it :D

The story has a good start. You do have to work a bit more on your writing skills. I would've liked if the chapters were a bit longer, but that's not something to seriously worry about. Some paragraphs don't start with capital letters, and in my opinion, you should correct that. There are also a few grammatical errors, though nothing serious. Pay a bit more attention and your writing will definitely improve. Keep it up!

I think this story has strong world building and a lot of promising description. Its very fun to read, though there are a few grammatical errors, I just wish there were longer chapters!

good going so far, the story is promising. XD seeing a lot of rookie mistakes though, like breaking up the paragraphs properly and grammar, but it doesn't take away from the book. Fix these mistakes and you'll go far

Hey! Good day to you! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email mollyringdom*@*gmail.com  (delete *）We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). Looking forward to your email soon.