SCP: TRANSPORTED (TEMPORARY HIATUS)

Hey guys, author here. I really hope that you guys enjoy this book. And it's also on wattpad and fanfiction.net. But I hope that you enjoy this book!

I had a whole proper review written out for this but decided to just backspace all of it away. I'm going to say what I want here, not as a review, but as advice. Firstly, where's the synopsis? The only reason I clicked on this was that the title pretty much said it all, but without a decent synopsis, lots of people are just going to skim past it. Your writing style is confusing and could use some work. The best advice I can give is for you to read some of the well-known stories on this platform and take note of how they do certain things, such as how exactly the character speak and what the follow-up text is for it, the rough estimate length of a paragraph, the background of characters, and so forth. The formatting could use some work. The "paragraphs" are far too long. Additional information should go to the additional information section, not in the middle of a chapter. That's the biggest problem of this story so far. Work a bit more on the characters as well. Like, make a character sheet of every character and give them like 20 characteristics, traits, abilities, personality types, etc that make them unique. Don't introduce most of these traits into the story directly, but rather take a roundabout approach. An example of a fairly well-structured paragraph with decent vocabulary that helps portray some of the characteristics of Zach: 'Despite Zach's prior fear when he learned about the foundation kidnapping him, a blooming sense of excitement welled up from his' depths after realizing where exactly he was; Inside of the very SCP Foundation that he respected! The idea of being able to use his omniscient-like knowledge to explore The Foundation would have been a rather thrilling one if only the guards weren't holding him at gunpoint; His anxiety well on its way back to cloud his judgment once again.' Other than those main pointers, there are a few things here and there that could use working on, but they aren't detrimental to the story. Just focus on getting a better writing style and fixing the formatting first. ~Some guy who cried after reading SCP-1762.

Keep going K E

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Author, please stop rewriting the story and make it larger with more chapters it doesn't really matter about the rest. I know you may be saying its not good enough but trust me it is