Made An Empire from an Island
On an ungrateful day, the kingdom of Vanil fell into turmoil. The civil war took a turn and the very brother of the king took over the kingdom betraying his brother. The King had to escape with his life. He took his child and wife and fled to the ocean.
After a lot of hardship, the king finally arrived at an island. He took a look around the island. After 8 years the kingdom of Vanil decided to take over the island. As such the king requested The Empire for Troops. With an astounding number of 100,000 troops in total, they charged towards the island and attacked it.
In this incident, William lost both his father and mother. He promised his dying father to achieve his dream and retake the kingdom. He promised to be the world's most fearsome and powerful leader.
William Vanil, also known as The God Incarnate and The Hero with his subjects also known as The Seven Coloured Deaths shook the world. He was written in the history of the universe by the gods themselves.
The story of how he became stronger than the ruler of the Universe.
What hooked me most was the depiction and the author's composing and the excellent command of grammar. It makes me crave to continue. Acclaim to your creator. I'll take after this story from presently
Always willing to read "Fantasy with Game Elements" . Liked the paced, didn't feel dragging at all. Though I noticed you like to start sentences with "I" alot. If this isn't intentional, you might want to try to vary it up in the future. Still worth the time to read though, thanks for the awesome writing!
The development of the story is very exciting to read. The plot is getting nicer and nicer as each chapter is unveiled. Although a few grammatical errors are there, it doesn't affect my reading. I hope the author put some time in the description. Other than these, it's a nice read. Keep up with your good work, author.
Thanks for deciding to write this. Haven't read the whole of it but am loving it so far. It's been worth the read. Thanks for the awesome write up. Cheers.
My first time reading something like this. It's wonderful and interesting. I will read more of it and leave chapter comments. Make time to correct some errors, especially your writing style; Alternating between third party and POV.
The plot is interesting enough to hook me. The grammar is not that perfect, but the story line is easy to understand. The story is about the revenge, struggle of the lead character. Keep it up, author!