MMO: Isekai no RPG - A Virtual Life In Another World - (English)

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This story looks copy and pasted off google translate, I cannot discern any editing done to its grammar. The world building has left much to be desired. The character description are very lacking, as in we know MC has got gray tipped hair and a white coat. There is no background given to keep you attached to the characters. The lack of scene transition makes you think he’s just teleporting all over the place. Since this is a “video game” based novel when talking about status and skills, there should be a status and skills. The use of describing the MC as a weakling with some false bravado, really puts me off this story. Review wise the only thing I can say the story does well is consistent updates.

It is great but you just need to work on using her, she, him, and he in the right places so we do t get confused on genders It is great but you just need to work on using her, she, him, and he in the right places so we do t get confused on genders

The main character is a different gender every paragraph and there is no coherent sentence structure. Didn’t even make it past chapter three before my eyes started bleeding.