The Mafia Game ( Hired Gun )
Eighteen years old, Ava Smith Kriezer, is on the hunt for the people responsible for her parent's tragic incident that happened years ago. She is one of the young skilled fighters known in the dim, hidden, empty lots and streets of gang wars and street fights.
One unfortunate night, she didn't have the choice to fight, and she decided to stay defenseless. That night, when she thought she stepped inside death's door... she opened her eyes to learn that she is the granddaughter of a multibillionaire old man that she have never seen nor heard before.
Despite being unsure and curious about how possible her situation turned into, she ran away and stayed determined in her ultimate goal! ..., but every time she gets closer, and gets a lead, one of her grandfather's men, Shyn Lee, is always in the picture... helping her. Could he be the knight in shining armor to save her from her broken world? ... or the one who will shatter it more?
(Parental guidance is recommended and that the novel may be unsuitable for younger children.)
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This is a fun story to read! The synopsis is great, and I love it! if the author can execute this perfectly, then you can have my 10 stars!!!! The only thing that I'd like to mention is the usage of onomatopoeia. It is okay to use it, but it would be better if you can add more depth into it. For an example the BAAANG could be improve like "I heard a blaring shot coming from elsewhere. It was like a sond of something cracking abruptly..." something like that.
A great cover page! Nicely written synopsis, which makes me curious about the content. You have an interesting concept for your story. The plot is intriguing. You're doing well! Good luck with the contest! I wish I could have more power stones ;)
I like this! This book has a truly beautiful storyline.💕 I really like how the author depicts the emotions of the characters in each scene. It's subtle, realistic and exact. The story flows so naturally and so it's easy for readers to follow. Nice work, author.👏👏👏
First few chapters already hooked me in! I love how the author depicts the MC's emotions. It felt so realistic. I also like that you give space for readers to paint their own imagination regarding the world building because I have the same thoughts when I write. This story will stay in my library!~
Hey author! I hope everything is going great for you. ✨I read your book and by far it’s one of the greatest works I’ve read here on Webnovel. I loved all the complexity in your characters and the way you set up your scenes. I think you are an amazing writer. 😍 You have such a way with words, and I love your writing style. Literally cannot wait to read more! If you ever have any free time, you should check out my new novel UnderHerSkin. I think you would really enjoy reading it. But if you don’t have time, I totally understand! Best of luck reading & writing!! This message turned out longer than I thought, but have a wonderful day!!!❤️❤️❤️
So far I am loving what I am reading, there are a few grammatical errors but all of nothing that can’t be easily corrected🤗 I would recommend this book it is quite interesting to read I think you all might agree with me💕🤗Kudos to the author
Writing Quality: Good and readable Updating Stability: Superb and always updated! Story Development: Nice pacing Character Design: It's nice and clean World Background: Had enough to engage more readers.
This is a very good story. I love how you give a detailed description of your characters and setting .However, I rated it 4.8 because of the errors . The tenses mix-up cause the grammar to be erratic. Please correct that and this will be a very catchy story. With that being said, overall you have great potential and I am going to be reading this story too. Already in my library 😃. I know that I want to journey with Ava to the end
Nice work author, intriguing plot and interesting storyline, the story had me hooked in the first chapter, and I really like the pacing too. keep up the good work author i’m cheering for you and i added it to my library already.
Interesting storyline and unique plot, you can display a lot of character development in the novel, writing needs to be improved otherwise interesting novel, hope to see interesting updates in future
Woah!! I like it..!!! I loved the plot and the flow is smooth. The writing made it easier for me to relate to the character. Looking forward to know the mystery behind her parents. Good luck, Author❤️❤️
Pretty good. The author really knows how to describe the rush of feelings of the characters. It's a good one to check out if you love mafia novels. Captivating plot. I like it.[img=recommend]
The story has me hooked. A very interesting storyline. I love Ava with the little I have read. The book is a replica of perfection 💖💖. The author did a great job of presenting Ava's emotions.
Wow, this book is such a too interesting one and I am sure it will become popular in this app. Good diction. More update from the author please.
This story has consistency and an incredible protagonist as well good descriptive writing, can't wait to see how it progresses, already added it to my library by the first chapter
First of all, the book cover is superb and the synopsis was well. I like how you convey the character’s feeling and how descriptive the scence are, I’m only at the beginning and I can tell this book will be great. I’ll definitely finish and wait for the upcoming chapters! Kudos to you Author! 🥰
This is a gripping story. A page-turner. The pacing was nice and easy to follow. You can instantly feel the MC's emotion. Great job, author! Keep on writing! :) I want to read more! :)