The Heatherland

A very recommended read. The chapters flow well and the story is interesting from the get-go. Good characters and world building. Keep on writing. Great job.

First few chapters piqued my interest, as they are very well written. Great character building, looking forward to read more chapters. This novel's a keeper!

Amazing! Very intense from the start. The world background is so intriguing and fascinating that you’re hooked from the get go. And the words come together to create such a beautiful tale. Amazing!

The book is very good because it very interesting, and mysterious. I like how we first start with knowing abosutely nothing, but things start to unfold the more we read.

Honestly speaking, your novel is very easy to read. I read all seven chapters in one sitting. I assure you that you have a lot of potential. I quite liked your book. Personally, it's the kind of story I like.

Pretty well-written and well-paced story with a cool back cover of the book. You did a great job on this. The first chapter was brilliant. Albeit dark. But great nonetheless

This is a very gripping story from the get-go, telling an impressive tale about the main character and his life inside of the world he only knows as his home. I'd really recommend it to anyone who's contemplating it!

The story is very mysterious in many ways, and when it gives a very suspenseful feeling when you read it. Now I don't know much about the world background because it's just a few more chapters, but... I'm not disappointed

(First chapter review only) General thoughts: It's alright. Nothing exactly exciting or intriguing has occurred to draw in much investment. Kinda stereotypical orphanage setting. Very show rather than tell writing. Obviously, it's the first chapter so much can't be said about the world or characters in the long-term, yet there is still so much lacking. Not enough is given to the reader to warrant more interest in the world or characters. Besides, maybe a poorly built fling and the protagonist being an orphan.

This book is about a orphan who goes through struggles and feels alone in a world, he his crush is a girls name gwen who is beautiful, however all his efforts are in vein, his with his painful life cycle, His closest friend was micah, I dont want to expose to much detail but its a good book highly recommended? Its descriptive , great plot, definitely a page turner, Great work Author thank you

Wow... the author is doing great... I can't believe I found this hidden gem which has been written beautifully. I must recommend this book to other readers as well...❤️‍🩹

Your story is extraordinary. your grip on your plot is very strong. Arrangements of characters are excellent, no doubt. waiting for the next chapters. keep it up..

I only had the grasp of the world background when I read the story's description. However, when I read up until Chapter 3, I still can't picture out what kind of world he was in. You may work on this one but may choose not to if the story was character-driven and world-building only serves as an aid to move the plot forward. As for the writing quality, I am happy that your tenses are quite consistent. However, you should refrain from using the same structure of sentences almost all the time, even if you want to convey an emotion, for example, to your readers. There had to be limitations unless it may sound choppy if you read the paragraphs for the sentences aloud. Instead of using pronouns or nouns at the start of the sentence, you may use prepositions, adverbs, verbs, or adjectives even, to amplify diversification. It can bore the reader if you keep doing this, especially in the first chapter. Nevertheless, I loved the characters. The boy was quite pitiful and it made me feel sorry for him. That's a good thing. Anyhow, keep it up, author! You'll definitely get to where you're aiming to arrive! :))

The first time i've read a novel with two protagonists and i love it! most protags are sometimes lonely, is good to see a protag with a bosom friend by his side! Thanks for the great novel author-san~[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]