Building a Conglomerate in Another World

The novel is good for what it is. It has great promise and makes you want to read more with the MC. But, you’ll soon find yourself skeptical of how the MC operates, how he knows so much technical-know-how in such diverse fields, and how he navigates the world he’s in to get what he wants. It seems too… easy. Even though you know, there is a practical and more believable alternative to getting what he wants. For example, instead of leveragint someone’s reputation to get a loan with no basis, put the building you own that has roughly similar value as collateral. Also, A lot of the things the MC gets away with or talks himself into getting, would not happen in the real world or be a lot harder. I feel as if the real world basics are not properly covered, such as some laws or policies as well as some world building, and as soon as a love interest is brought into it, the story begins to feel more forced than it felt before. I feel as if the novel just needs a lot more work. It’s ambitious and has a foundation, but it’s lacking.

later when the companies develop you should let him enter the electronic business and control the telephone business

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1 star for quality bc it's just written by chatgpt. good prompts though I guess as story makes sense mostly, expect for some part that's repeating. bro had a 1st meeting with the president at least 3 times

good novel

It's almost identical to your other book except for some minor differences. still it's a good book to read. so Author please don't drop it just like the other book. okay?

so far, it's going great. I can't wait to see how it goes.

Interested beginning I have high hopes for this book because of authors old books

1. Amber was employed by the MC to be his secretary, but I'm guessing the many chapters of Amber not making an appearance caused chatGPT to forget about her existence since in a later chapter, his secretary is someone else? 2. All that interaction and romantic tension with Amber and yet the author just kind of forgot about her. When she reappeared it felt more like "Oh damn, I forgot she existed. Better write her back in" from the author. 3. The MC already met with the president and yet in a later chapter the president goes "I can finally meet the man of innovation". Either chatGPT memory is lacking or the author is going too fast to the point of forgetting their own story. it wasnt even that long ago of the MC meeting the president before this chapter. 4. Almost every dialouge just feels the same. Constant usage of similar phrases and the way every dialogue ends as well is the same. Might want to experiment with dialogue to change stuff up because its hard NOT to notice dialogue feeling and sounding the same when I read them. Overall: I like the story, I just hope the Author puts more attention to detail like with Amber's existence and the MC meeting the president for the first time TWICE. Whether or not the author uses AI in their writing, I dont care, Just pay attention to your own writing and story and avoid these minor inconsistencies. They may be minor in your eyes, but they can really derail a reader from the story since they'll beq+q focusing on the thought of "Didnt he already meet the president though?". There's alot of timeskipping too, maybe thats the cause of these inconsistencies since the story is moving fast, very fast. Hope that from the chapter im currently on, I dont see anymore inconsistencies. what caused me to write this review was really because the MC's secretary wasnt Amber, who was formally employed at the end of a chapter, but a background character.

good novel but it can be better

It's good.