Building a Conglomerate in Another World

The novel is good for what it is. It has great promise and makes you want to read more with the MC. But, you’ll soon find yourself skeptical of how the MC operates, how he knows so much technical-know-how in such diverse fields, and how he navigates the world he’s in to get what he wants. It seems too… easy. Even though you know, there is a practical and more believable alternative to getting what he wants. For example, instead of leveragint someone’s reputation to get a loan with no basis, put the building you own that has roughly similar value as collateral. Also, A lot of the things the MC gets away with or talks himself into getting, would not happen in the real world or be a lot harder. I feel as if the real world basics are not properly covered, such as some laws or policies as well as some world building, and as soon as a love interest is brought into it, the story begins to feel more forced than it felt before. I feel as if the novel just needs a lot more work. It’s ambitious and has a foundation, but it’s lacking.

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later when the companies develop you should let him enter the electronic business and control the telephone business

1 star for quality bc it's just written by chatgpt. good prompts though I guess as story makes sense mostly, expect for some part that's repeating. bro had a 1st meeting with the president at least 3 times

good novel

Review from ch 267. This story started on a good foundation but took a nosedive after ch 100. The story is on rails for the MC at this point, as everything he does magically works out and he always faces the easiest opposition as the author forgets his own story. But let’s not get ahead of ourselves. This story started interesting with the MC trying to make it in the railway business which was interesting to read about how he navigated inventing and introducing new technology. Sure it’s a bit unrealistic to imagine some guy knowing all these technologies without some explanation, like he perfectly remembered his past life’s memories, but I left that slide. I shouldn’t have. As the story progressed, he started introducing tech that he shouldn’t even know how it works since it was outside his field yet he knows how they work and is active in their development. Now I am fine with trying to invent tech you aren’t familiar with but know the basic concepts for it, other stories have done this, but not as easy. And that’s one of the biggest gripes I have with this story. Everything is so easy for the MC, unrealistically easy. Just pour some weeks/month and do some lip service for a new revolutionary tech to be invented. The lip service is important because the MC is constantly giving a simple speech and for some reason the world around him eats it up, even his enemies act as what he says is how it is. Now the second but most consistent issue with this story, it’s inconsistency. The author forgets his own stories and what people/tech he has invented constantly. At one time there were submarines when the car hadn’t even been fully introduced in the world, or radio being a thing but then the MC “invented” it some tens of chapters later. And this is constant. Even later when the MC has a family, the names of the wife and child get mixed up at times. Now the third and most recent issue I have that is making me want to drop this. The MC becomes the president of the US and that’s when everything goes off the rails. The interest in the story was the building tech and business empire angle but now it’s constantly presidently stuff that is honestly borderline impossible. First this man has one of the biggest industrial conglomerate empires in this world’s version of the US. He is the military industrial complex, yet as a president he is being treated as if he is just some upstart and getting conspired against by people who should be beneath his power. Like they conspire to start wars yet the author forgot the MC OWNS! The company that has invented the tech that give the country its military advantage. how would it go if the MC decides to not go along with the war? Remember how I mentioned how everything comes easy to the MC? It’s worse later in the story, as the MC is facing a secret order and conspiracy but the MC just always magically gets the good results, like he randomly uncovers the name of the conspiracy without ever being stated how, or he can convince the public despite the media being against him. Which is stupid because I recall he invented the radio and TV and owns some of those media companies himself. How is he getting attacked by an industry he should honestly have the biggest pull on? Now the last issue, that connects to the previous point about the author forgetting things. The MC is a man from our world who died and went to the past. That’s how he has been able to “invent” things. However, even early on, the story seems to completely forget this fact. Despite some places having different names and people, this world is a copy of ours with honestly the same history. Yet the MC does not use his knowledge of future events at all or even point out he knows about it. He is about to face the First World War, which an educated man from the future should see coming from a mile away, yet he doesn’t act on it or even seems to know about it. Someone mentioned about the author using chatGPT to write and I may believe it. Unless this author is having multiple people write the story for him, there’s no reason he should be forgetting these fundamental aspects of his story. Totally destroyed a story with a nice premise. Thank you for reading my rant

1. Amber was employed by the MC to be his secretary, but I'm guessing the many chapters of Amber not making an appearance caused chatGPT to forget about her existence since in a later chapter, his secretary is someone else? 2. All that interaction and romantic tension with Amber and yet the author just kind of forgot about her. When she reappeared it felt more like "Oh damn, I forgot she existed. Better write her back in" from the author. 3. The MC already met with the president and yet in a later chapter the president goes "I can finally meet the man of innovation". Either chatGPT memory is lacking or the author is going too fast to the point of forgetting their own story. it wasnt even that long ago of the MC meeting the president before this chapter. 4. Almost every dialouge just feels the same. Constant usage of similar phrases and the way every dialogue ends as well is the same. Might want to experiment with dialogue to change stuff up because its hard NOT to notice dialogue feeling and sounding the same when I read them. Overall: I like the story, I just hope the Author puts more attention to detail like with Amber's existence and the MC meeting the president for the first time TWICE. Whether or not the author uses AI in their writing, I dont care, Just pay attention to your own writing and story and avoid these minor inconsistencies. They may be minor in your eyes, but they can really derail a reader from the story since they'll beq+q focusing on the thought of "Didnt he already meet the president though?". There's alot of timeskipping too, maybe thats the cause of these inconsistencies since the story is moving fast, very fast. Hope that from the chapter im currently on, I dont see anymore inconsistencies. what caused me to write this review was really because the MC's secretary wasnt Amber, who was formally employed at the end of a chapter, but a background character.

It's almost identical to your other book except for some minor differences. still it's a good book to read. so Author please don't drop it just like the other book. okay?

so far, it's going great. I can't wait to see how it goes.

Interested beginning I have high hopes for this book because of authors old books

good novel but it can be better

It's good.