Holy World

This story is great. I love the genre. I think it could have a lot of potential. I love the characters and their dialogue is great, not many people can make a dialogue interesting and you've done that. Keep it up, author.

Go read past the third chapter and you will definitely get hooked! By chapter 5, i actually put it in my collection because I genuinely enjoyed it. To be fair, I normally would avoid this genre as I never get to understand all the terms. BUT I was recommended this book and I wanted to give it a try and I'm glad I did. I thoroughly enjoyed it and would look forward to your updates, author😍 In summary, plot is interesting, everything is explained well and I can visualise some of the details described by the author, which is a bonus for me because I like to be able to visualise them hehe

The writing style is unique— this was the first thing I noticed. It a blend of informative, third person omnipresence and a neutral, creative showing “not telling” style. It isn’t something that you will run across frequently. The writer has an fluent and natural understanding of the English language — the grammar needs very little work, though I would consider shortening a few long paragraphs into more digestible pieces. This genre is new to me — that being system. It isn’t something I’ve read before or dabbled in, but the concept is interesting. It’s like isekai genre webtoons/novels — and the fantasy aspect and introduction to the character and steady buildup of the world around them is worth the time and investment. In all, it is worth its rating and I look forward to seeing how it concludes down the line.

Given that it's one of your first writing attempts as youve stated, I am madly impressed. You have the vocabulary and the imagination, if you just clean up a bit of the syntax you'll be a great writer. This particular novel has a fascinating world backstory and the main 2 of Andrew and Aisha are exactly what youd hope for, likeable, with their own personalities and ideas. I am truly looking forward to where this goes, especially as the prose continues to make marked improvements over the course of the chapters.

This grabs your attention in the first chapter and doesn't lose it afterwards. As far as fantasy titles go, this is fast paced, interesting, and has a unique approach to the apocalypse. The story structure is clean, and the conversations flow naturally and in a realistic manner. You're doing great!

A young man studies magic in a fantasy / sci-fi crossover, with a simulism theme. Very interesting so far. Despite the occasional grammatical issues, I definitely want to know what happens next.

What a whole new world it is! The massive impact just from the beginning was great. My first time to read something like this. And I think I would enjoy this. Let's see where the story is going. Great job author. 👏👏👏

😂😂😂😂 I love the humor and sarcasm of the MC, such a nice and refreshing character. The plots are unique and the developments are well done. I really like this kind of genre too. The pace of the story is moving just right as well. Good work Author! keep it up!

This story is really quite good. Your writing quality is very good, with few grammatical mistakes. I like how clearly you explain things. I also like how the plot is moving forward. A couple notes for you, author: -Careful of commas. A couple of places I noticed that you can add commas, such as after a "hey" or other phrases that ought to be separated from the rest of the sentence. -Careful also of punctuation and capitalization of dialogue tags. For example, "I really like cherry pie." She said. vs. "I really like cherry pie," she said. Use commas after dialogue and lowercase unless it is a name. -Use less emotional adverbs, such as "confusedly" or "happily". Replace these with showing or description. This will improve your prose and the flow of your sentences. Other than this, great job! Keep on writing!

That's ready script for a computer game! I like the science-fiction idea. You've successfully created a different reality. The plot is captivating and characters are expressive. There are also interseting descriptions of the backgroud. I wish you all the best with the story!

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The author has a good sense of narration. Being detailed on his story so you can clearly imagine it in your mine. The story has a lot of potential and if given the time to grow, it will be a million views or more in the future. I advise you to read Harry Potter or Lord of the Rings. Well you have system genre so read solo leveling. You can have insights there how to make a good system novel. Well I have done my part. Please review my book called Waking Up In Undead World. Happy reviewing!

Very intriguing! From what I've read, I know that this story is very well-planned by the author. You will be more curious to see what will happen the more you go deeper into the story. Great job, author! Amazing work you got here.

Yes! I like it soo much. Not my usual genre, but I got so enthralled with the world you created. The pace is just right and the writing quality is superb. Congratulations Author, this is fantastic! This is definitely added to my library. Keep the good work author!

I have read the first two chapters Author-sama, I was like, what? Year 2024?! The writing quality I have nothing to say, character designs also great but what I love the most is you world background, I know it's still our world but it gave me a different feeling towards it. Please update more chapters Author-sama!⭐