Tale of the Arcane Warrior

As the story hasn't developed too far yet, I'm lowering some of the scores. So far, it seems like your typical power-fantasy type story, and there's nothing wrong with that. Unfortunately, errors with spelling, grammar, and punctuation are rather common. It's still perfectly readable, but I feel it's still annoying. Perhaps the presence of an editor would help this. I also feel like the author could work more on descriptive language in order to add more detail and "real-ness" to the story. I do realize I'm being quite harsh to a new author. However, I firmly believe that constructive criticism is beneficial and necessary to encourage growth.

Una mierda el MC es tan ingenuo que me hace dar asco, porque no le pregunto a la puerta porque lo mandaba a el y si tenía que hacer algo? Y los bebés no pueden comer nada duro hasta el año y vos escribiste que recién pasado un día ya podía comer pan una kk