Desolate World
More than a hundred years after Earth was devastated by a nuclear war, the survivors finally began to adapt. Many Sanctuaries were built, and the technological developments let them live civilized lives again.
Some of them migrated to the Moon or to Mars to avoid the nuclear pollution ravaging the Earth, but many more chose to stay on the now ruined planet they called home.
In 131 A.R., a groundbreaking game startled humanity. A VR game launched by the Human Union changed the fragmented society.
Alex, a former gambler, was gifted free game capsules by the government with no explanation. Together with his family, they started their journey in this new world filled with magic and adventure.
They never could have imagined that the game was more than just a means for entertainment. It would decide their fate and the fate of every human-beings as well.
I know I’m a little biased, but I genuinely think the story has potential, and so far, the author is doing a good job of realizing said potential. I can’t wait to see where the author takes the story.
I've really enjoyed this so far. I appreciate the way the author allows the characters to be independent entities and not just an outlet for a power-fantasy. (*cough* Aeternabilis *cough*) The writing quality is good, and the story is developing at a nice pace. Also, it's possible to separate the author's inner voice from that of the main character. Keep it up, you've got a great story!
Writing Quality is 4.3/5 from me since the way the author describes things were easy to understand and wouldn't be much problem unless you're such a picky grammar reader. The update's stability is five, considering how the author able to update many chapters on the same day. Looking at the way the story goes fairly smoothly and logically without any hint of awkward development, I guess 4.7 is not a bad rate for the story development. Here's the unique. The MC was a gambler, but unlike any other gambler, he is surprisingly the opposite of a bad gambler, a good gambler with family being the centre of his life. He was bold enough to leave his job/hobby as a gambler to make his family's relationship goes well. The MC's wife also quite mischievous and tend to prank MC and her son. There is this moment where the MC's wife also broke out in tears upon knowing the MC's source of money was entirely came from gambling. This shows how MC's wife is another human being and not an expressionless robot, unlike in some novels. The MC's son was designed like a child of his age. Full of curiosity, childish, and reckless. The author has described the world background perfectly at the start of the novel. Hence, 5 stars from me <3
A few nice ideas but too many problems. The premise was interesting, but the characters dialogues and interactions are extremely cringe. Moreover, the pace is all over the place and the world building is full of plot holes.
It's kinda petty of me ngl but I like the idea of the book and the only reason it is not a 4 star is because of my view. When he chose his class I just find it unacceptable what he chose. The classes are ranked from the rarity. So the general d,c,b,a,s rank etc He had the chance to chose an s rank but didn't? Like I'm sorry what? How monumentally stupid do you have to be to not chose the best class you can? Like even a child knows what would be better to choose... It's just such bullsht to me. The whole reason is he doesn't want to be a gambler... but then it's a game. It's not real. I like the class joker but with the better class, it just leaves a horrible taste in my mouth. It's someone who asks you to pick between copper or gold. EVERYONE would choose gold but in this story he chose copper... So yeah gl to author
I’ve only read the first 50 chapters but I enjoy the story so far. I got annoyed at some of the character interactions, for example: I don’t like talking to kids like they are stupid, but it didn’t ruin the story. I feel as though it has gotten better the more I have read and I was tempted to drop at first but am glad I gave it a chance.
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Potential starter with great story buiiding.. I enjoy the way story describe character and i have a fun to look with a family play together.. And you know what.. Spoiler alert.. Joker.. What a nice class.. That was wonderful idea.. And with skill of card dice and token.. You really like to gamble man.. Good luck with the plot armor.. Im in, so go forth sailing with your tales...
hey ,your story is really n1 to read i found it a few days before. I dont can tell the end direction of your story @ the moment but the setting ist really n1 .I like it because it´s not like this "Normal Gameing Novel" like Legendary Guardian or so. Hope that you can bring more Updates to your novel that i can see your creator Path. mfg Kamu
It has a good story development and background setting. It just that it has some minor problems with regards to the usage of symbol/sign like (period and coma). In terms of updating stability... please release more chapters.
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I like reading gambling fiction, I hope it's fun
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This story is well thought out and has a good plot line. It's a very engaging post apocalyptic world that is going to go through another one. This story follows a family man as he avails himself of the opportunity contained in a 'game' while creating something that will last after they've left. Give this a try, you won't regret it. Something that the author could improve on is grammar. It's not bad enough to adversely affect reading comprehension, but the mistakes do stick out.