I really like the story world background isn't the normal reincarnation or fantasy we see everyday, having a story about the mordern world itself is nice. I like how everyone is friendly in the story and some few tragic scenes to balance it. Good luck author San and continue writing
2 years ago
3
Motsu_Kion
This is a great story. I think you just need to fix the grammatical errors. You can pass your chapters through Grammarly before posting them. It will help fixing the majority of them. :)
2 years ago
2
Scorpious_star
Nice work Author. The story really has a flow to it and makes me want to keep reading. I really like the writing style as well. Amazing way to describe the emotions of the characters... 👏🏼👏🏼
2 years ago
1
Dissociation
Quite liked this one, Synopsis hooked me in and I just read and read!
Excited to see the future of Angelo, and curious about the true nature of the alluded future! Only big problem was grammar, makes the story a bit of a trek to read at times, but you'll get better as you write and reflect more!
2 years ago
1
_Shantel
Love the story.
It could use some work though. The grammar is an issue ,use Grammarly it helps alot when writing and reduces the mistakes.
The plot of the story is good and I would love to read more of the book so am adding it to my library.
2 years ago
1
Nyamao
There are alot of grammar mistakes that I think you should work on. The story is good and well constructed just work on your grammar.
The synopsis really confused me though. Great work.
2 years ago
1
zigginah
You need to work on your grammar. You can use Grammarly when it helps a lot and maybe work on the synopsis too. You have to create something that will be .eye catchy something that will make the reader want more, overall it's a good story.
2 years ago
1
Aescwine
The premise of the story is good with the novel set in the 1880s. I am really looking forward to future developments and what happens to Angelo. One thing I would like the author to improve on is the grammar. It, at times, makes conversations difficult to follow. All in all, a pretty decent read!
2 years ago
1
lohse_
This story drew me in. I think it's an interesting concept in a setting I don't normally see, and I'm curious to see how everything plays out. Something that would help with that, though, is making the scene changes a little more clear. Maybe it's just my brain, but I did find myself confused at times. It's good to see something different, so good job, author!
2 years ago
1
Biva
Interesting plot with the 1880s theme. And the clock tower reminds me of my old school. The world building is great. The concept is new with the thriller. The changes of scenes make a bit confusing. If you make some edit that's would make more better.
Keep going on author.
2 years ago
1
InstaMoist
As I've read the first few chapters, there are a number of comments I'd want to make, and I will provide a review that is as objective as possible.
The first thing that slightly irritated me was the rapid succession of events, which prevented me from appreciating the conversation and context of the story.
Please excuse my slow cognitive processing.
The plot is original, and there are still many secrets to be unravelled, making you more eager to read it. However, each character lacks an explanation, so you forget about them when you read the next chapter.
Please pardon my brain, which finds it difficult to remember things.
2 years ago
1
kerryn
Got drawn into the book just from the beginnning. And the title is really nice. Just fix the few errors in the book.
Good luck on the WSA 2022. [img=recommend]
2 years ago
1
Rainbowprincess
I'm really impressed and so loving this book, I love the cover most and also the prologue.
Well done author.
Good luck on the wsa.
❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤
2 years ago
1
MortalLearner
I love the premises of the story. It has interesting storyline which keeps readers intrigued with its unique characters. Good job! Keep up the good work.
2 years ago
1
ZeroX0666
Great story with very few minor grammar errors but other than that you can tell the author is trying their best to write an enjoyable story. I look forward to seeing how this goes.
I really like the story world background isn't the normal reincarnation or fantasy we see everyday, having a story about the mordern world itself is nice. I like how everyone is friendly in the story and some few tragic scenes to balance it. Good luck author San and continue writing
This is a great story. I think you just need to fix the grammatical errors. You can pass your chapters through Grammarly before posting them. It will help fixing the majority of them. :)
Nice work Author. The story really has a flow to it and makes me want to keep reading. I really like the writing style as well. Amazing way to describe the emotions of the characters... 👏🏼👏🏼
Quite liked this one, Synopsis hooked me in and I just read and read! Excited to see the future of Angelo, and curious about the true nature of the alluded future! Only big problem was grammar, makes the story a bit of a trek to read at times, but you'll get better as you write and reflect more!
Love the story. It could use some work though. The grammar is an issue ,use Grammarly it helps alot when writing and reduces the mistakes. The plot of the story is good and I would love to read more of the book so am adding it to my library.
There are alot of grammar mistakes that I think you should work on. The story is good and well constructed just work on your grammar. The synopsis really confused me though. Great work.
You need to work on your grammar. You can use Grammarly when it helps a lot and maybe work on the synopsis too. You have to create something that will be .eye catchy something that will make the reader want more, overall it's a good story.
The premise of the story is good with the novel set in the 1880s. I am really looking forward to future developments and what happens to Angelo. One thing I would like the author to improve on is the grammar. It, at times, makes conversations difficult to follow. All in all, a pretty decent read!
This story drew me in. I think it's an interesting concept in a setting I don't normally see, and I'm curious to see how everything plays out. Something that would help with that, though, is making the scene changes a little more clear. Maybe it's just my brain, but I did find myself confused at times. It's good to see something different, so good job, author!
Interesting plot with the 1880s theme. And the clock tower reminds me of my old school. The world building is great. The concept is new with the thriller. The changes of scenes make a bit confusing. If you make some edit that's would make more better. Keep going on author.
As I've read the first few chapters, there are a number of comments I'd want to make, and I will provide a review that is as objective as possible. The first thing that slightly irritated me was the rapid succession of events, which prevented me from appreciating the conversation and context of the story. Please excuse my slow cognitive processing. The plot is original, and there are still many secrets to be unravelled, making you more eager to read it. However, each character lacks an explanation, so you forget about them when you read the next chapter. Please pardon my brain, which finds it difficult to remember things.
Got drawn into the book just from the beginnning. And the title is really nice. Just fix the few errors in the book. Good luck on the WSA 2022. [img=recommend]
I'm really impressed and so loving this book, I love the cover most and also the prologue. Well done author. Good luck on the wsa. ❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤
I love the premises of the story. It has interesting storyline which keeps readers intrigued with its unique characters. Good job! Keep up the good work.
Great story with very few minor grammar errors but other than that you can tell the author is trying their best to write an enjoyable story. I look forward to seeing how this goes.