Reincarnated as Bella Swan's Brother (Twilight)

So I used to have this big review for myself, but I decided to delete it and just say this: I'm a cool dude. Read the Fanific. Yeeahh that's all.

This is rough to read. Not to bad of a story overall. For a twelve year old with adhd. The author is unfortunately someone young and doesn’t know how to put a mature mindset into his writing. Which is understandable but still it makes the novel hard to read with the MC being very immature and super childish along with all of the other characters. If your young you’ll like this story and everyone is best of friends.

... well, the MC constantly does and thinks about silly things, the worst thing is that if that were the only case, it would be possible to characterize only MC as childish, but everyone acts stupid along with him. The problem is not being childish, but knowing that people don't act like that, unfortunately...

The ADHD on this mc is very intense... I really love twilight fics, but I'd hard to read when the Mc can't focus on anything for more than 100 words :/

Author, everything is great with you. Don't abandon your readers; I can't stand unfinished fanfics anymore. I'm almost giving up on reading because of this. Your story is incredible! Just one thing: if you're going to do a harem, please make it make sense, hahaha.

So I had to give up reading this and stopped at chapter 58. I'm the type of person to ignore reviews and judge the story myself whether it is good or not but for this I should have listened to the more bad reviews because they really did tell the truth. First off let me say this the story is decent it not great but it isn't terrible. The major problem with the story is like what everyone else has said the MC is horribly written. I will use this to describe him as a twelve-year-old who suffers from bipolar with some adhd thrown in while taking Adderall like candy. I hope someday this gets rewritten honestly keep the story the same but change the way the MC acts and this will instantly become a 5/5 novel in my book.

Honestly, the story itself is not that bad BUT i just cant stand the MC, i would stay away from anyone like him irl, i feel like he has mental impairment.

beta MC, no calculation , just a fool, if its been real world mc won't be alive after 10 chapters. ............................................................

I really want to like this fic, but I've come to realize that even with so many chapters coming out. A lot of them have nothing of importance going on. If he combined maybe 2-3 chapters together, it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it. This story so far has been extremely casual and maybe slice of life-ish(not sure if im using that right). Something interesting might happen one chapter and then nothing for the next few after. It feels way too slow. I dont know how to feel about the mc. He's not terrible, but he has his glaring flaws, which can be annoying.

The thing I hate the most with this type of fanfics is how stu*id the MC's at choosing their wishes. Like why ask for mental shield when you can ask for the same power as Bella and be immune to all types of powers? And why ask to be a strong vampire when you can ask to be superman without his weakness for example? The author putting so little thought on the very first chapter is very concerning...

Dude, why don't you make a TVD or TO fanfic? It would be really cool, and of course I'm not complaining about the Twilight ones, but it would be really cool to have one from the TVD verse. Imagine this vampire that you created who is the MC against mikaelson.

so far I'm loving the stories I do not mind a grammar's mistake I do not mind the childish don't mind it so far I can say this is one of the best Twilights stories I ever read dial all the Twilight stories always plot it's always getting me very annoyed this is the reason why I do not f*** with Twilight stories not like that no more you outdone yourself you much better than all the Twilight people who did better

Good but still nothing important till now, after more than 90 chapters ....... .......... ...... .....

A great novel that keeps me coming back for more and more. The Mc actually acts intelligent and does flaunt or show off his powers to others exposing his secret and the author made the original book characters not the exact same way of thinking and acting like in the books making the characters seem more lively.