One fine day, lordol have a dream on preregistered of the certain event, on the next day, he suddenly noticed that his world took a drastic change.
From its earlier peacefulness, he found himself in a world that seemed a dungeon with no escape, where everyone seeks for a safe zone, either by paying, stealing, or building one by using hunt materials earned through their fight for survival.
The story seems interesting enough from what I've read, however the author clearly needs an editor and someone who can help him with overall sentence structure. This clearly isn't the authors first language however there is potential in the novel, he just needs someone to brush up the errors he's made, as long as someone can help him with editing then I see potential for the novel.
Really recommend an editor so that the flow of the story isn’t interrupted. Should at least re-read so that sentences are properly made. ********************
nice description. i am expecting more from you. if you want to take a break .be sure to tell us. atleast we won't be bored waiting for new chapter
I cannot say whether it is the writer or translator that is to blame, but this work needs help. Badly. Weak character design and poorly translated. Still unable to figure out what direction this story will take. From the story element changes from chapter to chapter it feels more 'crown sourced' than anything.
Tem uma cara muito boa, pena que essa imagen de perfil é muito escrota, favor mudar, a inspiração é legalzinha, continue nessa obra bro.... tem meu apoio moral. Açúcar com pão, tem assento no u de açúcar, favor lembrar disso, pois é muito importante na hora de ffazer um bolo açúcarado
It needs an editor badly. I don't even want to look at it. One star with no exceptions. Not even the synopsis is immune, at least use grammarly.
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This book REALLY needs someone more fluent in English proofing it. Great concept for the book, but the language makes it very difficult to continue reading.
good read. quite interesting concept. hope for more. please write more. don't stop writing! he also has a map of his book, most people don't.