Rising Dawn
Fear, anger, and a desolate feeling of hopelessness. A young human child grew up in a loving, but poor family, with the simple desire to help his parents.
With his coming of age, however, everything takes a turn for the worst, as a tragic series of events changes and forges him into a man capable of fighting the world itself.
As callous and indifferent as he becomes, the weight of an entire race's future, and loved ones, brings him back from the brink of self destruction.
This contradiction of pity and self loathing, hate and care, has the MC, Cyrus, struggle to find his purpose in life. Fate, however, seems to lead him on the path of rebellion against the supreme pantheon itself!
"Tell me and I forget, teach me and I remember, involve me and I will surpass the heavens!"
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First ever novel that I have written. Let me know any suggestions that you might think would help with the story!
*The cover art is not mine* {if someone wants to make one let me know in a comment :)}
They say when you can’t beat them, then join them. Well, here I am with an author review :). As a biased opinion I wont go on and on about the novels good points. I’ll just give a simple idea of things to expect in the novel. 1) Will be focused on the MC’s journey - I’m basically referring that all the tags will be evenly mentioned with no dominant topic. However, this could lean more towards kingdom building and wars during the later chapters 2) World building and certain mysteries will be added in throughout first 50 chapters. - Hate to break it too the “instant gratification addicts”, but a good story needs a build up. No one likes a one pump chump if you know what I mean 😋 3) Harem will not be done in the usual happy go-lucky way - Cant spoil too much, but dont expect everyone to get along immediately. Also not every girl will become a waifu, unless their is a lot of support from readers. 4) Their will be some tragic moments that the reader will get emotional about - Once again, MC won’t always get his way here. Things will happen, but I do have a bottom line, just can’t let you know for spoilers sake (It wont be super bad so relax 👍) 5) Action scenes are detailed and descriptive + the cultivation/Powers will be simple but very novel - Always hated reading the same “Chaotic Body”, “Chaos Demon Technique, or “Heavenly Infinite Manifestion”, for cultivation stuff. Also the eastern influence on cultivation will be extremely minimal (No heavenly tribulation and stuff like that). - Now fighting scenes WILL NOT, I REPEAT, WILL NOT, call out attack names, nor talk a bunch. I find that super un-realistic and disturbs the flow of battle. Of course their will be a bit of trash talk, and what not, but it will make sense. Also no, “He slashed forward”, “He slashed horizontally”, and the like. It will be much more detailed an easy to imagine. Thats about it! If you have any questions just mention it on here and ill try and give a response! Hope you stick around and make a great novel with me! 😉
Great story! Love the premise of the novel (its my Favorite genere 😄). But seriously, I have a lot of high hopes for this novel so please update author-san For anybody that wants a comparison for this book, I would point out City Of Sin and Monarch Of Evernight. Seems to have that ruthless MC that takes care of his own. Also has a really deep and realistic character development plot. Turky draws the reader in. But the best prt is the action scenes. Just based off the quality and easy to imagine scenes, I really look forward to the war arcs!
This story is lit! With a talented author, this novel was in good hands. I gotta say I'm impressed! Accompanied with hard work and perseverance, this will pave well in the future! Good luck author and may your novel be blessed!
It's a good start. The main character has been designed well, and the backstory of the world is great. The only thing you really need to work on is your spelling, grammar and punctuation. This brings down the quality of the writing a little bit. If you could find an editor to flesh out those spelling, grammar and punctuation errors, your story would become a much easier read.
So I'm not good with cultivation stories. I can read the mangas just not the stories. All I can say is I can't wait for this to be turned into a manga so many people will read it. As a story, 5 star as a manga 100 stars. Just think about it. It is amazing.
I like, I like, I like!!! Fresh storyline and nice lead character. I just want to stay up all night to read more. Please update more, I need more chapters. I can't wait to see what happens!!
The plot is really amazing! I like the way you developed the story. I have to say that I'm really impressed with it! Well, I don't read this kind of stories much, but I like it. Good luck!
The author certainly has a way of writing words that pulls a reader into their own world and doesn't let go easily. The detailed descriptions are like an added cherry to the top especially, since there are no grammatical errors in the story. This story is a way better than the normal run of the mill stories we get here on this site and its marvellous!
Alright, here it is. From the review swap. My thoughts are: The first chapter felt like a generic battle. Yet, from chapter 2 onwards the story picks up momentum and becomes overall quite enjoyable. You a little problem with overwriting. What I mean is, you complicate some descriptions that could be replaced with shorter sentences and more direct ways of describing. Sure, the show don't tell rule is important, yet if you embellish too much, it can cause a slog on the pacing. I think that is all. Overall, good stuff.
Though I don't read cultivation stories much I liked it. And I liked the way how you explained your story. As a new writer you have talent and I admire it. Keep it up dear author! I appreciate it!
A very intriguing story. Every chapter is so gripping. The writing style is so smooth and it has best narration. The plot is interesting and the world background is extraordinary. As an author myself, this book is giving me an inspiration to write with this quality. Hoping for more chapters!!!
Let me preface this with an apology. If I sound stunningly inarticulate at times in this review, I can't help it. My mind is completely fried. I am still dipping my toes into the literally fiction pool, finding what works for me and what doesn’t. Books like these, of fantasy, are definitely my cup of tea. This book is like the dystopian Lord of the Rings, with its richly developed culture and economics And also the supporting cast of characters is excellent. And the world building is top notch 👌 Please update more author.
This story has an interesting start. The main character is quite interesting though I thought he is a spoiled child at first. Had been sheltered too much. Maybe he could use his gift in a more useful way to help his parents in the house. Story development was a little slow. And I think the grammar needs a bit of improvement. All in all, this story has potential. Keep on improving! :)
Well. I never read cultivation stories. I don't even know what is that, lol. Can you explain briefly? And secondly, it sounds amazing. And thirdly, please make the description/synopsis a bit longer. It... doesn't catch. If you start reading the book, it absorbs you, but you know, readers give 65% of their attention to the book cover and 35% on the description. If that doesn't catch them, then they won't give the story a chance. Your cover lacks a bit, and so does the description. It's good, not giving spoilers, but there must be enough spoilers that can drag someone from the ear along, lol. I am also a mystery/thriller writer, the reason I've spent a lot of time thinking what to write and what not to write. I hope it helps... Good story outline though. It's amazing.
Short review: A good hook, nice descriptive language, interesting opening chapters, some mystery and foreshadowing of great things to come. Long review: The writing is very good, with only a few minor kinks, but nothing no one with any sense would scoff at.... Unfortunately, I'm not very sensible ^^. The story development at the start has everything a story needs; huge stakes, sacrifice for the greater good, and huge future obstacles. The characters are overall very detailed, with well-defined features, however, I think the introduction of the MC falls a little flat, initially. The appears to have a good amount of thought behind it, and the foreshadowing for future events suggests interesting developments. Good job!