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-"Where am I? Where exactly is this place?" The questions in my mind were increasing.
-"Calm down my child, you are in uncertainty right now," said a wise voice.
How can I calm down? This place is a fucking purgatory.
But never mind, let's see what happens to me
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Disclaimer:
I do not own the Tbate novel, I am only responsible for the characters I wrote.
This is my first book, I hope everything goes well. I am open to all kinds of criticism as long as it is not an insult.
The protagonist's lack of emotion and interaction with others makes the story uninteresting. The story is just following the original direction and no originality. There's no noticeable difference. Writing needs improvmements.
I don't know what to say about this work i will be honest i never have given a bad review to any novel or fanfic so here goes basically Author destroyed the charcter i mean literally mc is emotional less rock and the reason author gives he lived in limbo for 95,000 years man come in if any body lives that much time do you know how he will be normal extremely normal they want hide their time in that place as much as possible didn't you read manhwa or fanfics with same concept like sword King and limit breaker other works the people like them want to Cherise the moments they have with loved ones and any body tries mess with they will show the monster they are hiding or you could have gone with orphan route it would have given idea that he is like that . And author mess with gender when it comes to he/she concept. Any way story,concept and idea are good all i could say is I don't want another Arthur Leywin who is kinda breaks the girls heart and make family cry by being righteous and other things sometimes being selfish and loving being emotional is good so please try to improvise the story
School days is better,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
It's actually pretty good, but the problem here is that's theres barely any dialogue and interaction, like it's really little and the pacing is a little bit to fastMy suggestion here is to kinda add more dialogues because the character here feels very robotic, but so far it's good
This is my first book and I'm really hopeful because I think I can hold on please support me
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Never once have I seen such bad reviews in a Tbate Fanfic.
the story is kinda fast super fast you should rewrite this author it has potential but you wasted your like the guy who has the arc of embodiment from fairy tail who use the in a stupid way
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I really like it but can u make him more caring of his family and the people he cares for
I'm liking it so far, i hope after tbate, he will cross to another dimensions where he can grow more stronger and stronger till he can defeat the god itself
Pretty nice story though it's quite confusing sometimes and how the emotions of the MC can be quite a creep but overall it's good 👍
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Honestly would be an enjoyable read IF the author actually gave us interactions. If i were to explain this story, It’s like pulling an ssr character but skipping the special animation. It just feels empty. I hope the Authot does a rewrite and fixes the story.