A man with bad luck that nobody can compare will fight to survive until his last breath, but his bad luck was stronger and had a strange way of death.
When he opened his eyes, everything will be different ...
Having another chance to ascend to heaven with your own feet and hand will fight for the Hegemony of Heaven and Earth!
PS: I barely speak Spanish so I do not speak English and use google translate, maybe can cause cancer in your eyes! deeply warning!!
No offense but this fanfic is cancer to my eyes. The grammar is so bad, it makes me wonder whether I'm reading english or not. The story is fairly boring as well. Don't ask me what makes it boring, it just is. Here's some tips though: He, him, his is for males. She, her, hers is for females.
Good concept.. character reference good.. but... Boring... Can't take it anymore after a few chapters.,. 😪 . .
Good attempt but honestly it's cancer. Ruined madara's character, his potential, along with his experience. He would do anything to get power. Haiz it's really disappointing and the grammar was so so so bad. The novel's structure was another problem. Idk what else to say. Just improve and rewrite is the only solution I can think of.
The death was the second most funny death i ever read on this site Author-san should be more careful with he/she I hope it will not be dropped Good luck
I wonder why I want to write a review about this novel, but everytime I read this novel I feel that this novel is not that bad and everytime I keep checking this novel's update just to see that the author is not updating this work, I want to say "What the hell author you're torturing me by doing this." And thanks for your hard work.
I am someone who can read and understand LNMTL novels.. ever tried that $hit? Anyway... My brain can handle that.. i was really proud.. untill i tried to read this novel.. Author you are something else.. is this a puzzle or a novel.. i don't know.. to understand what the author wrote u gotta read a sentence couple of times and even then you can't understand... Author sama.. you better write a novel in your own mother language.. or learn some grammar.. or find a editor.. anyway.. just do that.. And to my fellow readers.. i don't wanna hear, oh its good story but only his grammar has a problem.. well fuq you..rate it seriously.. because of you guys i gotta go through all these ****ty stuff.. fuq.. waste of time
good novel, is fun, progresses well, at an enjoyable pace, is not like other fanfiction where in the first chapter the MC give a mega broken technique and the novel becomes boring. for some people the beginning will be boring, because they are used to reading novels where in the first 5 chapters the MC already has a technique that defies the sky, gets into trouble, slaughter, etc., typical cliche.
Wanna know whats worse than reading something that has grammar worth toaster bathtub-ing yourself? An incoherent mess that confuses the **** out of you. Am I being unfair as I've been spoiled by so many stories with good grammar? Fuck no, if you're gonna write this in english you better fucking learn fast how do it properly. Lastly stop writing dialogue like that; thats some next level LN **** right there.
Other than the fact that there are too many grammatical errors and author seriously needs an editor, everything else about this novel is perfect.! The grammar though.!! Sometimes, it doesn't even make any sense.!! It's very annoying. Keep up the good work. It's one of the best and very unique... It's something completely original. I like it.
The story is rather interesting, as it takes a different look at ATG. My big problem is the grammar though. Most of the time he she it is messed up and some sentences are barely understandable. Please use grammarly more and get a proofreader. I'm pretty sure this story could be much better
The idea of the story is great but the english of the author sucks because english is not his first language. So some parts of the story can't be understood and not clear.
Anooo.. Author-nim.. Is Merlin male or female?? Could you make it clear.. You always use he and her.. Please make it clear.. If male just use he and his.. And if female please use she and her.. Don't confuse your reader!!
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