Civilization(suspended)

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The characters lack depth. Especially the wife. I would have forgotten her if she wasn’t mentioned once in a while. The protagonist doesn’t seem to think before acting, making me wonder why he did this or that. An exemple is having the USA agents killed. It doesn’t help anyone. Also, he doesn’t seem bothered after being directly responsible for the murder of hundreds of people. The technology he is offered is way ahead of what Earth is capable, and he should have to spend a serious amount of time and ressources developing the intermediate steps. He reach those steps too easily (if he didn’t bypass them). The author should check technology trees in games such as the one who share its name with the title of this work, and remember that theory and practice/application are differents. Also, the system rewards are much to great for the tech development he completed. World background is lacking. Little to no description of the characters, surroundings, buildings and inventions. Interesting, but the execution need some work.

I frankly love this story. There is not a lot of like this around and I love sci fi. I hope this story continues to at least 50 chapters so that people catch this story.

Is good.

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