I like this, the idea is neat, it's just a bit annoying that the mc didn't do much to the story, but he's still in first year, so i can't really judge that as it's still quite early.
3 years ago
11
Axel_
wait don't tell me it already ended yeh?if so I would be feeling hollow and empty when u saw poison I felt he die in movie 2.if so time to find new excitement.
3 years ago
4
Joshua_Swan
a great premise that's poorly executed due to only 1 reason
writing is perfectly legible
the general world and adjustments to the plot, retaining its relevance is well done
the main character is by far the crux, weighing in at an approximate 5 iq, he's extremely foolish, think Naruto level stupid
the MC is what really kills story development for me so I can't give it 5/5
updating stability is great
3 years ago
4
Asphyxiated
I just found this And i havent found anything even remotely similar to this the idea is fantastic and your writingso far seems pretty good im excited and super interested to see where you take this please for all that is holy dont drop
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3 years ago
4
Tibbles
Amazing novel I really enjoyed seeing the RuneScape incorporation as a system and the plot was amazingly well done with proper twists and turns. This is extra true for the second year. I hope you can continue with such a amazing story!
3 years ago
3
Alchemist
It's a good thing the author dropped this fic.
It just followed the plot of the original story, without making any real changes.
The worst part is definitely the MC, who treats life like he's in a novel or video-game. Referring to people as NPCs and ignoring everyone he sees as unimportant side-characters.
Even if he knows the world he lives in from a book series/movies, it's still his new reality and he should logically treat it as real.
Instead he completely lost his grip on reality and started treating everything as if he was playing a VR video-game.
Someone like that should be locked up in an insane asylum.
2 years ago
2
Khan00
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3 years ago
2
koolsalad
Completely new concept, quite interesting. I am curious to see what it’ll develop into.
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3 years ago
2
J2407
Please continue this story, it has so much potential
a year ago
1
Noober
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2 years ago
1
aiden_rivera
pls. don't drop it's been a month and I'm scared my fanfic addiction is getting worse help kksksksbsbbsbsbsbsbbsbsbsbsbbsbsbsbsbsbsbsbsbbsbsbsbs
3 years ago
0
DaoistK5YRj2
Can anyone recommend another fanfic with Hermione as love interest?
................Just filling the required characters...................
3 years ago
0
OJKill
Uma das melhores Fan-Fics de Herry Potter que li, o personagem principal tentando desesperadamente fugir do tabuleiro de xadrez do Dunbledore .
So far a really enjoyable read :) keep up the good work. What you could change is your usage of MCs name, it's used too often. Try substituting the name with 'he, his' etc. Otherwise, really good job and a fresh idea, again keep it up and it will be an amazing story ;) .
I like this, the idea is neat, it's just a bit annoying that the mc didn't do much to the story, but he's still in first year, so i can't really judge that as it's still quite early.
wait don't tell me it already ended yeh?if so I would be feeling hollow and empty when u saw poison I felt he die in movie 2.if so time to find new excitement.
a great premise that's poorly executed due to only 1 reason writing is perfectly legible the general world and adjustments to the plot, retaining its relevance is well done the main character is by far the crux, weighing in at an approximate 5 iq, he's extremely foolish, think Naruto level stupid the MC is what really kills story development for me so I can't give it 5/5 updating stability is great
I just found this And i havent found anything even remotely similar to this the idea is fantastic and your writingso far seems pretty good im excited and super interested to see where you take this please for all that is holy dont drop !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Amazing novel I really enjoyed seeing the RuneScape incorporation as a system and the plot was amazingly well done with proper twists and turns. This is extra true for the second year. I hope you can continue with such a amazing story!
It's a good thing the author dropped this fic. It just followed the plot of the original story, without making any real changes. The worst part is definitely the MC, who treats life like he's in a novel or video-game. Referring to people as NPCs and ignoring everyone he sees as unimportant side-characters. Even if he knows the world he lives in from a book series/movies, it's still his new reality and he should logically treat it as real. Instead he completely lost his grip on reality and started treating everything as if he was playing a VR video-game. Someone like that should be locked up in an insane asylum.
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Completely new concept, quite interesting. I am curious to see what it’ll develop into. QqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqQq
Please continue this story, it has so much potential
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pls. don't drop it's been a month and I'm scared my fanfic addiction is getting worse help kksksksbsbbsbsbsbsbbsbsbsbsbbsbsbsbsbsbsbsbsbbsbsbsbs
Can anyone recommend another fanfic with Hermione as love interest? ................Just filling the required characters...................
Uma das melhores Fan-Fics de Herry Potter que li, o personagem principal tentando desesperadamente fugir do tabuleiro de xadrez do Dunbledore .
nice fanfic !!ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
So far a really enjoyable read :) keep up the good work. What you could change is your usage of MCs name, it's used too often. Try substituting the name with 'he, his' etc. Otherwise, really good job and a fresh idea, again keep it up and it will be an amazing story ;) .