Reborn as a Chaos God of Carnage

The fanfiction has a promising and interesting idea that has the potential to become a great story. Unfortunately, the reading experience is hindered by the poor writing style and bad grammar. There are many spelling and grammar errors that can cause difficulties for readers, and the plot is confusing due to unnecessarily complex sentences and unclear phrasing. We would recommend the author to take more time to express their ideas more clearly and precisely, and to conduct a thorough revision to improve the readability and enjoyment of the story. Despite the weaknesses of the writing style, the story is promising and has the potential to become a masterpiece if carefully revised.

Really good novel, keep it up

I hadn't really known about 40k until now so I got to read a good book and search more about 40k

Honestly a really good read so far and as there are not many chapters as of yet cant really give a full review, but if you like 40K chances are you will like this!

The author, unfortunately, has never typed a single ” . “ in their life. They focus a lot on the visual aspect of their story and none of those pesky things like characters or dialogue. The character that speaks the most is probably the system… I am not caught up with the story so I don’t know if these things improve but it is kinda a slog here towards the beginning

good idea for the story , but its hard to read with the poor quality of writing

too bad. the protagonist is a slave to the system💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩

really good more please not a lot of warhammer 40k on this app :(

This fic really needs some good editing.

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Will it only be oc harem? 💜❤️🩶[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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The story while well written is more about lemons than it is about 40k. Every chapter along with confusing perspective shifts feels like it's working up for 18+ content and not progressing with being a warp god. Also it is very similar to another story written by 'dez_burns', suspiciously similar.

God, I love this story, keep doing what you're doing man. I never get to read anything like this, a story about a new chaos god and from their pov, it's great 👍