So, apparently I'm Albedo now...
And to make things worse, I'm in the Marvel universe, which one exactly, I've got no fucking clue.
Fuck man! Why do I have to be in the body of a inverted person! Do you know how attention drawing white hair and red eyes look like in the real world?! It's been like what, the 4th person who asked me if they were natural?!
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I gotta dye this shit black, like my original hair was...
I don't write many reviews, but I just couldn't skip this one. Like, man, if you're aiming for a realistic scenario, at least try to make it actually feel real. The MC gets an Ultimatrix and then goes to Fisk for identity proof? That’s just way too unrealistic. I mean, of all things, a guy watches TV(however he got the news), realizes he's in the Marvel Universe, feels bad about it, and then decides to go to some random thug for identity forging? Everything was going fine, and then -bam- this happened. I just can't continue reading after that. Best of luck to the author with the novel.
Worst among all the Omnitrix FF out there. MC is literally a Retard on Steroids. Author is not a Fan of Marvel and Dont know shit about Ben 10
Oh, yeah Ultimatrix. haters begone. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
I quite liked it at first, the overall development was going well, the pacing was good and the character interactions were something else. BUT the thing I did not like was the character of the MC, like cmon dude get a grip, he is afraid of the power of Alien X just because its too powerful and fears losing control. Never has there been a precedent of a celestialsapien losing control. I mean WHAT IS THIS DUDE EVEN AFRAID OF!!?? Its already great that he gets Alien X after all it directly makes him one of the most powerful beings in Marvel and it is a good protection against cosmic threats BUT this is dude wants to lock it away. I mean tell me what the fak is he going to do when mephisto or the celestials come knocking on his door?? Fight them with the power of friendship?? Well guess what, thats what he been doing all this time, he deals with threats with the power of friendship and plot armour, like the fight with the destroyer armour and Zy'skar. The MC is a wimp and does not think about the future threats, the cosmic dangers and dimensional lords like dormammu. The FIRST RULE OF SURVIVAL IS TO USE EVERY RESOURCE AT YOUR DISPOSAL. The dude clearly does not understand this and acts like a wimp and an idi0t afraid of the one power that can guarantee his and his loved ones safety just cause he is too afraid to man the fuk up.
The idea of "sugar daddy Fisk" is great, but the writing leaves much to be desired. Especially those "I" after every two or three sentences, they just cut me without a knife. 😇😇😇😇😇
im too tired and lazy to explain my point after the author sees my review so i decided to just leave things blank, believe me when i say its better this way for everyone.
after the first two chapters I knew this fanfic would be boring and unrealistic, how did I know? Because the first thing mc did was wake up, decided it was too quiet and started running only because it was TOO QUIET, nothing was chasing him, nothing wanted to eat him, but he thought that because it was too quiet he had to run . [written from translator, because English is not my native language and I want to make as few mistakes as possible]
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okay I got to admit it normally takes me longer to do reviews on a story but I have became invested in this story so much that I started thinking about stuff that both kingpin and his son can do that would be appropriate for both their morals that could benefit both. so yeah as long as the chapter updates continue please read this story about a guy being given the powers of ben 10 and adopted by king pin
overall it's a pretty decent ff of ben 10 and marvel... nothing too spectacular but it is a fun read. some more work could be done on the characters and maybe give the mc some background for him to share even if it's made up, something like 'i came from the future or the previous owner of the ultimatrix sent me' something like that to spice up the story and maybe better guide the others towards victory. aside from that everything else is great keep up the good work
Incrível simplesmente, no começo eu não botava fé no desenvolvimento dele com fisk, com o passar dos capítulos vi que essa história é a melhor que o autor já fez até agora, adorando tudo que está acontecendo e estou esperando mais capítulos [img=gift][img=update]
I love it Keep up the good work man.......
So far it's great. Conversations have depth though a little too deep for the scene sometimes but much better than all the CN translation crap available on this site. Good work mate
Who would be the love interest for the main character?