Leon Zoldyck

what i imagine the character to look like when he is grown up ................ . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. , , . .

The MC is an SI from the zoldycks, and he has more or less fked up cannon, and that is dope. what did he do? well he joined a major ' group ' of people and more or less formed a bond with em. so yah, if it goes as it is, cannon should be over, unless the author just allows cannon to happen, after what he did, that'd be sad. You know the quirks in BNHA? u could probably create some of em with nen, with better abilities. ex; mirios and sun eaters and momo or even bakugo? cause they do have some hard restrictions? or even some DF abilities like kumas or magellens [ MC probably has the necessary requirements cause he was poisoned as training] or naruto nara clan shadow abilities [or gekko morias shit ] or the kaguya clans bone ability [ MC probably has the necessary requirements again since he was tortured. u know bone break and shit ]. Sai's paint shit? or even kanjuros shit from one piece? Eitherway its cool. hope MC uses fiction SI knowledge for advantage and hope u fk up cannon. any relationships just build. hope MC is OP since he is a zoldyck, and no one near his age matches him cause, you know...he is zoldyck and an SI [ only reason gon matched was cause he MC and had genes ]. anyway GL

He doesn't behave like a zoldyck or a assassin at all. He plays with his targets shows emotion during a job everything that is not allowed as a assassin. He is being constantly manhandled by people 10x weaker than him, He is talking about how he started training to be a assassin at 3 years old, but doesn't do anything in his missions with the things he should have "learned", like doing it quickly and silently. (P.S. I know I repeated myself a few times)

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First of all, it is NOT an SI(Self-Insert) story. I would say it's an AU with the MC being an original character. Writing quality is average having some grammar issues (wrong spelling, using a comma when a period should be used/using a comma when you don't need one at all, calling a guy her/calling a girl him) but it's definitely not the worst I've seen. The story is still readable. Story development is going towards a good direction. Author is essentially gonna make MC **** canon up and I'm looking forward to it. Character design on the other hand is just meh. MC is looking to be hella op, already mastering the basics of Nen before his teens. Not much world building has really been done so... Overall, it's looking to be a decent story.

Only 4 chapters in and this is already shaping up to be a wonderful fanfic. I really like the character development already and the plot direction looks to be really interesting. So, all-in-all im excited to read more! 😁

A masterpiece, that's what it was. But, some slight inconsistencies like the age of the characters, how much time passed from an event to another, with MC talent how strong he should be after some events, his powers, and so on and so for, brought it down a notch. Now it's just a great find. I still recommend it and hope author will someday correct these inconsistencies.

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Liking the story and can’t wait for more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

lame is the word, mc is talked about like he is some big shot even from birth, learning most nen abilities in just a few hours, using nen in the womb, sensing nen at birth, mastering 4 basics in 1 hour mastering the advanced ones in the same day and then proceed to be a weakling... with a lame nen ability, very.....

i think you must fix the ages v

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