The Hidden Village: Naruto Fanfic(Finished)

By no means am I hating on this fanfic. I liked the direction you were going with a new hidden village. But to me it seems that you’re obsessed with dragons. I wouldn’t mind the constant mentioning of dragons, if your mc had any other substance or personality other than ‘dragon village this, I’m the dragon king that’. The personalities seemed rushed and the pacing is way too fast for a fanfic of Naruto. We’re just suddenly thrown in Tanaka’s life without an explanation of any of his Powers/arsenal.

To be honest this fanfiction has a lot of potential, the concept of starting his own village with advanced technology in narutoverse is personally very pleasing to me who loves kingdom building novels. But its sad to say that I was dissapointed when absurd and illogical things starts popping out everywhere. Furthermore, things were too fast paced and lot of things were skipped that could have made the novel longer. Like the part where there could have been development with his wife and since it was simply stated that he suddenly just had wife and stuff like that. The author could have slowed things down and develop things better. Even though my expectation were shattered, this fanfic was also fun in someway if you just accept everything. Even though my expectations of a good kingdom building novel inside the world of naruto were not met, it was still was a lot of fun reading this fanfiction. I would still recommend this fanfic to people as good wish fullfillment fanfic.

Ara~ It's LazyTanaka so no doubt about his work. Anyways, as long as he managed properly thr village then he can bring the #TruePeace that was yearned for by many different characters only to be attained using plot armor. KUKUKU. Like always, it is a great work from LazyTanaka~

I’m really sorry but where is the Naruto FF here? From what it looks like you just use the naming sense in it. There is no plot or anything from the original but there is useless thing about shokugeki, deadly sins, JSDF gate and other mangas. Thi idea and beginning nice but the rest unfortunately a disappointment. I could count the original characters on one hand and the repeatable being Hasirama and Madara. To me this has almost nothing to do with Naruto and looking at story progresses he won’t even be born.

Basic op naruto story where mc is basically the strongest by the 10 chapter. the only thing kinda cool is the village he made and him bringing stuff from other stories. Its okay if you have nothing else to read

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it is a legit fast-paced! a great story for starters kukuku. You can go f* Otsutsuki Parasites huuu. anyways, I hope there will be more kingdom-building.

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Frankly, I don't hate the story but the fact that it's badly written. The idea is good, great even. A new village in the Narutoverse with its own technology, awesome but each chapter has a lot of illogical elements. The part of Universe playing basketball is so badly executed that I had to skip the majority. The fact that he has to poach other people in other villages to build his own is embarrassing. The timeline for having the village is poorly executed, the village will be too new to have any legitimacy to become the best in such a short time, it should have been at least a century before canon. These characters should have been manufactured by himself in the system as well as the particulars. Beginners with 10 characters with powers and about fifty civilians and leave the populated the village. Stay discreet and among themselves and don't go to other villages, coded in the very DNA of the inhabitants not to copulate with other villages, be twice as strong as the others, etc. Anyway, a few things to plan