Trapped in Time
What would happen if you got stuck in Time?
Zia has completed her Ph.D. in Botany and has applied for the post of lecturer/ Professor. She joins a High school as a temporary teacher and is entrusted with the task of leading a group of ten students on a trekking /camping expedition.
On the way they meet a guy who seems to be a trouble maker but later, he proves to be a pillar of strength. Early morning their camp is attacked by Bears and they flee taking a different route. But they are lost. They enter a lost world where people are living, in hiding, for over 250 years. Their technology is much advanced as compared to ours. Their world is called ‘Utopia’ but now it is changing due to an oppressive ruler, meaning the ills of our world have manifested in Utopia too.
They are trapped in the time of this hidden world and want to help the people there fight against the oppressive ruler and his cronies. The oppressive ruler wants to make a number of Time Machines by using the brains of the scientists who died in harness at the site of the experiments. They all decide to help the good citizens of ‘Utopia’ the lost world. The huge brains are destroyed and the Orbs of the scientists escape from the huge pulsating Brain to help them in their mission of destroying the Huge brains at other centers.
In this process, the crystals that are used in the hypnotizing guns are almost finished and to get more they split up to go to the 'Magical World' through a curtain which is actually a portal. The Magical World is a flat man made Earth-like satellite, which was made as a joke to taunt the scientists 7000 years ago, and which is still operational. Here they meet the inhabitants. They are fascinated with the advancement of science especially the talking chips and the flying cars. They see a completely different world where animals, plants, rocks, water etc. can talk. Before you touch anything you need to seek permission. They also meet the Aliens called the 'Crocodile Race' who have come to the Magical World (the flat satellite) to get supplies. They see a spaceship being guided to land by the scientists of the Magical World. They also see the inside of the mountain where the controls are situated which help in maintaining the environment of the Magical World.
They get an invite from the Aliens to visit ‘Titan’ the satellite of Saturn where the Crocodile race has settled. At present they are on the mother Ship going to Titan.
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Will try to post a chapter in a week now.
At the time of writing, only 3 chapters were up. Thus, it was only based on the events prior to the 'trapped in time' aspect as stated in the synopsis. Overall, it has promise. There's not much that can be said about the plot itself due to the more 'exciting parts' have yet to be touched upon. Writing Quality: Great. As English isn't my first language, any grammar mistakes (if any) was not noticed by me. The writing is smooth, the description clear and realistic. Stability of Updates: 5* in good faith. Story Development: high potential. The build-up is good, indicating that the future chapters will be good as well. Character Design & World Background: Well written and realistic. Since it is 'modern earth', not much can be said about the 'creativity of world background'. However, it was depicted well and that's good enough for me. Overall, an enjoyable read. For those who would like mystery and intrigue, I believe this is for you.
Firstly the synopsis is very eye catching. Writing quality is is nice. Updates are quite frequent. The story is very interesting and attractive. The world background is well designed. And the characters are also very nicely designed and defined. The Author has done a nice job....👌 Keep up the good work! I will be following the story....
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The novel seems to be an amazing story, with a promise of mystery later on. It is educative also and I am sure children will like to read it too.
Although this book has only just started, I am very optimistic. The title is concise, but the content is not simple. The plot of the story is full of ups and downs, which fascinates people. I hope the author can persist in updating and bring good stories to more people.
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The author's prose is quite simple but attractive, the sentences flowing smoothly. There are only a couple of minor errors that will not alienate readers from their reading flow. The author also does a good job when mixing paragraphs of the characters with informative segments. As for the rate of updates, it looks pretty constant so far. The story progresses slowly but surely at the moment. Just past half of the chapters published so far (and especially two thirds into it) the main conflict begins to unravel, as the story focused initially on introducing multiple characters throughout each chapter. Perhaps the author could have allowed herself to leave certain segments of his characters for later, or perhaps she could have intermixed them more with the plot itself so that it would have progressed more effectively. As for the characters, I have to give credit to the author. Considering that she had to focus on so many at the same time, they are all quite well-fleshed-out, written and portrayed convincingly so that readers can connect to them properly. The fictional universe, perhaps, is the greatest strength in this story. The plot remains within realistic margins for much of its stretch (I read that the author had to change from "realistic" to "science" fiction, and I certainly understand the reason). A lot of what I've read so far is focused on a group of students camping, and the author certainly knows how to make you feel part of that experience, from minor details to the exploration of nature itself. In general terms, this is a rather compelling slow-paced and character-driven story for nature lovers and readers looking for more grounded, adventure-themed sci-fi stories.
There was no other way of posting this. I need to inform my readers that I had to change the genre of my novel from Realistic Fiction to Science Fiction. In Realistic Fiction you need to hover around reality like you write about a cancer patient and how he combats his health issues arising due to chemotherapy etc. This is close to reality. You cannot deviate to extremely imaginative situations. Realistic Fiction for did not give me much scope for my novel. Earlier, I could not change the genre but I finally managed to do so from Realistic Fiction to Science Fiction with the help of the mobile app. Now, I can write about many things which may not be possible now but may be possible in the future. If matter is truth, I do mention in the creator's notes.
The story is getting exciting! There are lots of amazing information most people do not come across with. And as a nature lover myself, the plots makes just make me excited for the next!
This is quite an informative novel. I actually learn a lot. I even googled blue pine. Lol.. N they are beautiful.😅 Four chapters, we can see that it still at the introduction stage which is really cool for we get to know the main setting of "Trapped in time"(just an assumption). If author managed to exploit the botany+mystery this novel can be awesome. I'm looking forward to the next chapters. Ps:I feel like reading one of my fav manga 'cage of eden'.
Interesting. The synopsis drew me in since it's quite unique. So far, the story is developing nicely and coming along smoothly even though there are some errors it does not setract from the enjoyment of the reading. Give it a try. Keep up the good work, author!
This is a very nice story. This story motivate me about myself, It is based on reality Overall this is very interesting story I just press my thumb on five stars. I hope renu mam will come soon with a new story.
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow? XXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXPXP
This work is both relaxing and entertaining to read. With only five chapters out I wasn’t able to get a complete picture, but what I was able to read was promising. If I may give you some pointers? My apologies if you find them uncalled for, my intentions are good. Sometimes the writing needs some slight polishing. One of them: “Yes of course ma’am,” the personal secretary replied. “He has been waiting for you,” she added. I believe there is a pass in time before she adds ‘He has been waiting for you’? If not it can be perfectly written as; “Yes, of course ma’am,” the personal secretary replied, “he has been waiting for you.” But I assume there is a time pass (she walks trough the room for instance) my advice in these situations is to write - for example - this down; “Yes of course ma’am,” the personal secretary replied. She went back to typing before adding, “He has been waiting for you.” Another tip I hope to give you is to add less ‘she said’ or ‘he added’ in your dialogue. It’s unnecessary and tiring to your reader. Other small things like; retelling something (meaning you describe something happening and then write down it happening are also not always necessary) Example: After voicing all instructions like a bullet train, the principal told her that she‘s dismissed. “You may go now,” said the principal. These of course are all simply some small style changes that don’t deserve to called ‘real errors’. I hope you have a lot of fun continuing your work, keep going!
Very nice story. I have saved it in my library to read. The story is educative and enjoyable. It is a mixture of reality and fiction. Since it is not earmarked for a particular type of audience it can be read by children evwn.