Louis didn't want his heart to be broken, especially by a kid ten years younger than him. But he couldn't help it. It was the exact same feelings he had with Liam.
Wow. I really think you could have made this work without the pedophilia part. There were a few grammatical errors throughout, and the story felt a bit rushed with the relationship area. You didn't do the best job describing the background or the characters very well either. Again, the story in my opinion kind of just felt wrong because of the age gap part. You are a great writer with pretty good ideas, just maybe try to avoid the pedophiles. I did like how you wrote about each of the fake dates, but it got a bit repetitive. Something I would want to see in the future, would be more description in your writing.
Wow. I really think you could have made this work without the pedophilia part. There were a few grammatical errors throughout, and the story felt a bit rushed with the relationship area. You didn't do the best job describing the background or the characters very well either. Again, the story in my opinion kind of just felt wrong because of the age gap part. You are a great writer with pretty good ideas, just maybe try to avoid the pedophiles. I did like how you wrote about each of the fake dates, but it got a bit repetitive. Something I would want to see in the future, would be more description in your writing.