They called me FIVE
**READ ME**
THIS BOOK WILL BE UNDER REVISION.
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My name? Lance Augustus
Age? 15
Nickname? Five.
Why they call me that? Because the mark tells us so.
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"Don't be stupid, steer out of trouble, and whatever happens, stay alive."
I really don't know why Dad always repeat those words to me everyday. I take heed of his words. Play by his rules, never dared to go against him except if it's extremely necessary.
He's all that I need to get by. Our life was ordinary. Everything was perfectly fine, perfectly normal, just an everyday routine we get used to live. But then this guy calling himself 'The Seeker' came... And he start making a mess out of my life.
He said I have powers. - Who believe that crap?
He said I have extraordinary abilities. - Cool! I want to be Superman.
He said I was chosen. - Who? The god of newbie bullies?
The mark of five imprinted deep into my skin proves that I am one of the TWELVE. - You sure it's not a tattoo? I firmly believe it's a tattoo.
I never believe him. I drove him out. I did not listen. I wish I did. Maybe he could have help me. Maybe he could have save me from the trouble of falling right into their trap. I know nothing. Because of my stubbornness I lost everything. So now I'm all alone. But she stretch her hand to me. She gave me hope. She invited me to come. And I did.
So our search began. For the remaining TEN.
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First of all, I like the title! It kinda reminds me of the book "I am number four". It also has a unique story line that the author described in the beginning of the chapter. That goes to show how dedicated he is (the author) to let, readers, know the world! Great job (plus *coughs* the scratching of his balls WKKWKW) Overall I like how you explained the story and what they see. The only thing that I want to point out are the confusing words and sentences in the story. It didnt distrupted my journey, but it would be really nice if you could improve those few lines better!
The constant mix of present tense and past tense is reallly realllllly annoying. And after reading like 4 chaps, I still don't know if you intended to write things in present tense or past tense. Other than that, there's not much to badmouth regarding grammar. As for WOrld and character design, they're very very interesting. Everything's explained in a quick, no-nonsense manner, and you can see the characters' personalities oozing out from the pages. Some passages read in a bit of an exaggerated manner to emphasize plot points and character traits, but it's nothing too overbearing. As for story dev, I rly can't say much at this point in the novel
I haven't read it yet, but i know its great. Why ? Cuz i can feel it. I saw this novel last week and the first thing i noticed since then is the release rate, and its pretty cool. I'm gonna wait some more chapter to read, but i know i'll enjoy it. Keep the high release rate and i'm sure u'll reach something. Thanks. :D
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Your writing can improve. But The writing flow made me easy to read and understand about the characters and everything. I can imagine them as I read it. Your writing is neat and clear. Keep it up!
Great cover! it instantly hooked me for the story. And so far writing quality is very good! as for what should be improved. the synopsis... its a mess. I'm my opinion you should properly arrange it. Also after reading some chapters I noticed some of your sentences were too long. don't be afraid to go on to the next line. Also am very doubtful about your chapter names(perhaps make them a bit shorter?)
I adore your writing talents! It's really good, and far more advanced than so many other novels i've read on this platform. This isn't typically the genre i'd pick, but you convinced me to keep reading - because the story was so freaking interesting! Will definitely come back! good job <3
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I love your writing style, It gives more life and emphasizes the story line even more. The Author thought of a very captivating concept that will definitely leave the readers hooked and wanting for more. Keep up the good work, Author! Kudos!
wonderful story. it just pulls you in. each chapter makes the story better and better. you just get drawn into the story as you keep reading. i think spelling errors and grammatical errors can be ignored since they are found in almost every book. anyway. this sooks to be a promising book.
Title kind of reminds me of I am number four. I am yet to read a few chapters but what caught my eye it the book cover. If the author is reading this, is that art original? Thanks for noticing. :)
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Wow! I love it! the story of a hesitant hero. truly remarkable narration, strong plot that drives hordes of readers to read the story. it doesn't hurt that the writer belongs to the same nationality as I. rated this a perfect 5 stars!
Writing quality: no grammatical errors or misspelling can be detected. Stability of updates: ☝️ updates everyday! Story development: new, can't say much Character design: liekable the characters World background: doesn't focus much on it unlike any novels Over all it's good 👍