The Venom in my System
All his life, his been looked down upon, picked on, and bullied, Kai was a seventeen-year-old kid who got bullied in school, from since he could remember, in his free time he played online games and never dated an in his life, girls always pulled there nose up when they saw him until one day something happens that changes his life, darkness clouds him as the venom slowly runs through his veins, burn, agonizing unbearable pain, all because of a simple video game, good and evil comes in opposing pairs.
Take both pills, Kai says to Maka. The blue one will change your life forever, and the red one will make you get revenge on those who have done this to you.
The same happened to me, but I am here to help you she pleaded, “this one girl his been playing online with for so long is now here to save him after severely being beaten half to death.”
An icy breeze gutted down the night-darkened lane, blowing scraps of parchment through the skeleton of broken crates and barrels.
Maka looked up into the wind-torn sky, letting the freezing downpour run across her face, the cloud writhed, intertwining masses of black and gray briefly illuminated by flashes of lightning that boomed through the night like evil laughter.
The dilapidated buildings and peasants' shanties around her looked like rat-chewed dollhouses as the temples hunched like sleeping behemoths beneath the angry sky.
The ornate marble spires and golden domes looked dingy in the squall; she was leaning into gale slushy water that stung her face and deadened her lips; the only moist that could hydrate her was blood as she crawled on her elbows over to the body lying the with a heartbeat, her thirst quenched as she came closer the smell of death and blood made her heart beat faster, scraping her nails on the concrete ground. Maka sinks her teeth into his Neck.
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I have read up till Chap 25 and this is my thrid review for this book. It's a really good read. Great storytelling so far. The mystery just keeps pilling up in the story, there were unexpected twists and turns which draws you in and keeps you contiuning reading. What can I say, this is a MUST read, so give this book/story a chance. It worth's the read. Great job author!
Honestly I’m enjoying you’re story. They only thing that throws me off is your grammar. Other then that good stuff!
This story has a very promising start. Most people can relate to the struggles of being a teen in grade school. I also like the older sibling angle. it give s the main character depth and lets the reader connect with them on a personal level.
So Ive read like 1 chapter or so, and its pretty good. Well better than how I would write anyway but it has a lot of potentional but the character design kinda lacked.
This is an interesting story. So far, the characters are intriguing The writing needs work (the switching from the first person narrative to third person and back can be a bit confusing sometimes) but the story so far is worth reading. Welldone Author.
The synposis and characters were really on point, and they give to the story this flavor that pushes this story further. It's very good, and being there's only 4 chapters, things are soon to happen.
It is a very intriguing story. I was hooked from the synopsis.I already love Kai.The descriptions are written very nicely. looking forward to more updates. you just need to work a little bit on your english.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
It is an interesting story with very mysterious elements, much isn't revealed yet but I am eager to find out more. The 'English' needs a little work.
I read it all and found it interesting. I can already tell that this will be a good story. I like Kai and feel bad that he gets beaten up. Keep up the good work.
Hello author! I really like the backstory of the characters. And I especially like Kai. I think there could be some improvements in the writing style but its still amazing!
Really good plot and characters are well designed. The writing style could be worked on a little, with the change in person but this book has a lot of potential. Good luck author and keep working hard. You've got a great story here.
Interesting story. The characters are good and there is a great plot. Grammar is generally good, but the first chapter changing from third person to first was a little confusing. Otherwise, good work author
the beginning is quite good and entertaining, it has good characters, it has a good backstory that gets you into the story.[img=recomendar][img=recomendar]
I am already in love with Kai & Maka and I can't wait for more. I love it that you've given the characters personality. Hands up, the story is engaging and builds anticipation. Now going to chapter 2, adding this to my library
The title itself arouses curiosity in the mind of the reader. This already tells us that something action packed is in store. Can't wait to have more from you author!