A multiverse fan-fiction

Read up to chapter 23, I legitimately enjoyed parts of this story but its flaws really hold it back. Specifically in terms of characterization and story pacing. In my opinion there is a lack of depth in dialogue, character relationships and overall story. Mc has some character development in the beginning and with the Ancient One. Outside of his humor he's not a compelling enough character for me. He's a recluse whose only real motivation is to get stronger. Aside from reluctantly involving himself in hero work. Any relationship he has with characters is skimmed over and awkward. I.E him making Bruce Banner his butler, changing his name and demeanor, which was just a bit too absurd. His relationship with Nick Fury and Avengers feels one note. The romance is also clumsy, and forced. It felt contrived for Mc to have a past wife who was basically a doppelganger of Scarlet Witch. Just to have a reason for him stalk the real one years later. The story pacing is what ultimately sinks story quality for me. The MCU plot feels stuck on rails. The only real changes are a few dead characters are saved. Even with that the story follows the exact same beats. Since a few scenes here and there are copied word for word from the movies. The story makes it clear the MCU is just a pitstop for the Mc. So the world doesn't feel explored at all. We just skim over his time in world war 2 and speed run through a few MCU movies. We don't even get a hero name for him even after he saves the day. Thanks for reading my review and please excuse my rambling.

Reveal Spoiler

bro is a assassin he really assassinated characters of marvel in a different way.

You had one job author.... But you messed it up 💀the mc sucks, the others characters suck and even wanda has become irritating like iris in flash, which I never thought was possible in any marvel fanfic. just put this fic out of its misery 💀💀

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This is almost copy of the movies. Didn't change anything because author can't write after that. Too much time skip. Charcter is useless although having a lot of powers.

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story is ended in less than 20 chapters , all i see is fillers . he love is less then desirable. author just for making up word count write anything that will make this more boring .

it's a nice fanfiction that I like, I hope you continue this fanfiction

A very decent novel I recommend everyone to read it, the main character is very fleshed out and not cringy, and not a simp. I like how he handles the situation and his involvement .

Keep this shit far away from me Please

dialogue is written poorly and awkwardly and situations are poorly explained with point of views not properly defined, overall I couldn't read past like six chapters