One Piece: Martial Art

1- the WG dosnt give out bounties for randoms for no reason, so mc getting a bounty for just fighting mihwak is retarded. Hell they didnt even approach him, and yet they gave him a bounty. Thats stupid. High bounty is dope, but give a reason. Hell luffy punched a noble and attacked marine ford and destroyed impel down and he only had his bounty raised by 100 mill (though all fans hated this, and i agree...)but i hope u get what i mean 2- what retard tells that they are from another world? Dude, u dont do this. Why would u do this? Unique power is believable, especially in one piece 3- why is MC so trusting that he gives this info within hrs of meeting? I get they fought but seriously? Telling u are from another world to a stranger? I am an amnesiac would've been enough Look story is interesting, dope even BUT damn man, no bash/flame but ur bk has some retarded shit

This is the worst story ever. He ends up in Africa, eats a fruit and immediatly turns into some godly being that is able to challenge mihawk. Made up powers that he instantly got without explanation occur multiple times. Also you randomly mention a superpower after a few chapters without explanation. Your story just makes absolutely no sense. The pacing is all over the place.

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Ok... I read my work after the blackout from the writing and found many shortcoming in the story. So I thought why not review my own work. So far I think the pace of the story is good.. comedy felt good except for some cringy part. Grammar is ****ty with lots of substance missing. Characters are pre established in Canon and no major changes except for ocs. Overall I think it's ok for just casual reading. I think I can except it as passable for my first story.

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