While sneaking out off the city the young orphan Renato stumbled into a hidden cave discovering a strange stone tablet, after touching it multiple lives flashed through his mind. Follow him on his journey to travel unhindered through this world.
I dunno if it's just because I've read too much stories...bur I found this plot too typical.
The characters seems to have no distinction and while the writing itself is not bad and it is stable, there are no particular part that make it different than the other similar stories. The emotional part of characters are simply not there... Like when MC got his past lifes memories, he should have more reaction to it such as fear, shock, confusion, and who am I? Ren? Or am I *blah past lifes names*? And, another thing is even when he accept the past lifes memories, if a child got memories out of nowhere they will be influenced by it. It will create trouble. The personalities of his past lifes will not be easily resolved like you seemingly written.
6 years ago
1
zd4zaas
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
3 years ago
0
gee_ringdomstories
Hey there!
Good day for writing! If you wanted to check whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
I dunno if it's just because I've read too much stories...bur I found this plot too typical. The characters seems to have no distinction and while the writing itself is not bad and it is stable, there are no particular part that make it different than the other similar stories. The emotional part of characters are simply not there... Like when MC got his past lifes memories, he should have more reaction to it such as fear, shock, confusion, and who am I? Ren? Or am I *blah past lifes names*? And, another thing is even when he accept the past lifes memories, if a child got memories out of nowhere they will be influenced by it. It will create trouble. The personalities of his past lifes will not be easily resolved like you seemingly written.
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to check whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.