An ancient World

this novel has an interesting story , the only thing lacking is the absence of s e x .in the situation the mc is in , given what we know about history, a guy in the mc's position would be fucking 1 of his 12 wives at least twice a day by his current age and would been married at 15 in that kind of society where girls start giving birth by 13 . aside from this your mc is cool and i like the world you made for him

I love reading about [An anciend world] mate fix you cover Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please fix your cover i feel physically nauseous every time i see it.

it's a good lecture and with a light but good beginning the writing quality it's good and the fast rythim of the lecture it's really good, the MC it's pretty smart and not very ambitious or with a Hot-heat that go for all the chick's for him, even can say it's a little cold of her personality, but having a good family bound. the Stability it's good if have in count that only have 21 chapter's until now. the Story have a huge world to see, and can have a best development even if have a close world. the character are pretty basic and not much deep, but they are not a complete asshole like much of the novel's and even can have a littleof compation to the enemy's that are not that much of a bad guy's, but clearly are not a good guy's. the world Background it's early to say but can say that really have enormous prospect's about, that it's the best the novel it's a little of a Slice of Life and that can make more impact if thing happen, like will not have much surprise if in a novel where the mc it's a inmmortal with billion of year's know about magic in a new world, so the posibility for this novel are infinite.

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It’s great when people try to write stories. The biggest problem with this story is however that the writer lacks the necessary knowledge of language to tell the tale. On top of it he likes to hit the third wall. Here is one big NoNo.... Never ever call the main character in you own story simply MC. Give home a f***ing name. It doesn’t matter if you develope your main character further, not doing him the ******st curtesy. A second Nono is to forget how to do some rudimentary punctuation. Sometimes you have “.” and “,” mixed up. Where begins your sentence..where does it end? Keep it ****** and short if this is a problem for you at the moment. Furthermore I think you should give yourself more time to proofread what you wrote. Not only to check for errors but also to see if you can read your own work and understand its structure and content easily. And eventually you find the time to brush up on grammar and vocabulary :)

I can't, I am sorry but I cannot bear the pain of reading this mushy mash of a novel. Although it has an average story so far but your novel has a lot of wrong in both grammar and spelling. So yeah good luck I guess. BTW I put 3 star in stability of updates since I only read up to chapter 4.

A good story with a lot of potential.Even though it lacks action(which i like very much) it still keeps me hook in.Keep up the good work and hopefully you end this story that will not disappoint me.Also, your cover says An Anciend World not Ancient.Just pointing that out.

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As a new story from someone who hasn’t written before this shows a lot of promise and potential. The biggest flaw for now is the bad grammar and sentence structure, but the author knows that and tries to improve his work. So far I have to say good job and keep up the great work! If I see that the flaws have been fixed and the writing becomes stable I will edit my review to a better score. I look forward to what you come up with.👍

The story is great. Fast development but with an explanation. The existence of the myth is a nice touch, I hope it come back. The fact that they can't learn past 50 is strange. The worst is the grammar, the way the sentences are written or thoughts expressed. It feels like the entire thing was passed through google translate to many time.

Lol fix the error on the poster...........,.................................................................................I haven't read your story

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Esta muy bueno. Vale la pena leer solo espero que alla mas desarrollo en el Mundo como animales prehistoricos, mythicos y legends. Tambien estaria bueno que alla forma de hacerce mas fuerte pero sin que se convierta en una novela de cultivation.

The story is interesting, the protagonist is well disign but some times I have to read twice to undertand what is he saying, bit in general all is ok 4 stars. mi buen amigo latinoamericano