Collection of Monster Girls

Here's another story that deserves more recognition. The MC is strong, the women around him are likable, and the plot is interesting. Plus, the writing is pretty decent and better than many original stories I've read. There's going to be a few writing mistakes here and there though, but it's completely understandable as the author's native language isn't English.

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I like the title Monster the most, whether it's related to monsters. Good luck on the webnovel and make a lot of dollars........don't forget to buy bread in the morning

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Surprisingly good. The plot is quite nice, and the premise of creating monster only harem girls is quite fresh. For now the choice of girls is also surprising for me. Even though i don't adore mono-eyed girl but alice in this story is too endearing and selfless i don't even care about that. There was also plot in the story about fighting bandits. I skipped that because i felt that it's a bit too long and i just wanted the romance parts.

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The quality of your writing is better than average but to help improve your style I would suggest read a few fantasy books from different writers to see how they write their stories. Stability of updates is really good for you have very little drifting from one chapter to the next. You have a great story development just some parts are a bit rough that some polishing would make a world of difference. Both your Character design and World background could use a little more help. Think of the character being you so how best would you describe yourself and what was your background like; ie: was you picked on being the youngest child, did you have very little fiends due to your parents job or status. The same would go as far as your world background, how would you describe a new city to someone who has never been there. Try to describe thee ocean for the first time while your standing on the beach. In your story writing you want the reader to follow along experiencing the same thing you are but through your character's eyes. Overall I hope you keep writing for I would very much love to see how this plays out.