Invincible Colorless Butler

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so this is my first time doing this...... ok the story has a good concept?.... I like it but the grammar is making it hard for me to continue on. I could read only to chapter 5.

I really liked the idea of the story. It caught my interest. But after reading through 7 chapters(9), I am done. :/ There are thing that may catch others attention but its not my cup of tea. (Everything other than Writing Quality is a 4/5.) The writing is grammatically wrong in many places and it makes the sentences not make sense and hard to comprehend what is ment. (I have seen worse so 2/5.) I know English is confusing so dont worry about it to much. But I got board of the story. :/ (Sorry that the ‘first’ review is a negative one.)

Grammar isn't the best, which is to be expected of a new story. But, my area of gripe is the fact that the MC is expressing emotions as an 'emotionless' character. You can't design a character with such a complex narrative and suggestion and completely disregard it. Interesting plot and amazing theoretical character design, but the execution is lukewarm and forgoes its meaning.

Sorry about this, mate. Volume 1 (which I call the introductory volume) was just horrible; the pacing was way too fast, barely any world-building, character design was 2D and "character development" didn't make any sense whatsoever, and the romance (or romance development) was simply garbage. I get that you want to do a character arc for them but that's not how you go for it. I, for one, barely care for any of the characters, much less the MC. So if I don't care for the characters, why should I care if they develop? It's about making us care that they will develop. You barely touch upon the relationship between him and his master and the other princesses too then you added that random one-sided romance, then everything (if there was any) was gone thanks to that war and he left everyone, while others were in fear and in awe of his abilities, he suddenly gained a random obsessive love interest thanks to a DESTINY which we had no idea about since we didnt KNOW about it. I read volume two but I just didnt care anymore about the previous characters in volume one, aside from the obsessive princess. Much less when you added more characters that still has no personality; in fact, now you're simply using cliches in your characters like the arrogant prince. Hope they-- and I mean everyone from volume 1 and 2--will actually have character arcs, because they are what makes up a story. The same goes for the MC. My overall point is: I couldnt care less for your novel or how the story will turn out because you, as the author, couldnt write a proper reason for me to stay, specifically in terms of characters.

A imitation story, there is no new or events, characters are programmed for expected events and the world spontaneously has possibilities, but the hero has lost all the poets. How will he enjoy, but if the MC don t feel any think how can we feel

Not super far in the story, but I can tell it is an inexperienced author. The story does not have a bad premise, but it is executed kind of poorly. You can feel that they had an idea they really liked, and wanted to tell it as soon as possible, even if is not great for a naturally developing story. It feels forces and rushed. One thing that could be changed for the better, is that some things should be discovered later instead of immediately. Like the fact the the curse will continue across life times, there is no reason for an enemy to tell you that. I could have been found out in the same chapter after the mc has tried to get rid of the curse. Another instance is when the princesses try to get him to remove his mask to see the scars. It could have happened more naturally if he slipped away from the gathering removed the mask and the princesses snuck out and came across him (just met them, but they seem to have that sort of personality).

Im not even going to bother reading it, literally the first word in the title is spelt completely wrong. That says everything about the quality of the story when the author can't even be bothered to spell the title right.

A great book. The grammar is rarely bad, and when it is, it's still understandable nonetheless. Also, the MC is strong from the start, one of my favorite genres. Also, I seriously advise you give it a try even if the comments disfavor it. A 101/100 for me.

it was good at starting , seeing this new chapter I'm really disappointed....[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

I could barely get to the second prologue. Yes that's right you didn't read it wrong second prologue. Also, how about introduce the characters normally instead of wasting a chapter with their descriptions like it's some kind of f****** manga. The story also starts by introducing our MC and then continues to put him in the back for the most part until the end of ?the first volume? Description is misleading and should say this is a novel about a bunch of princesses going to magic school. The grammer is god awful and it's quite clear the author couldn't care less about editing or proofing normally or with a site like grammerly and yet they expect us to pay. Sounded like a fun novel but it just isn't.

Reading the synopsis i find out the MC has no emotions. And right below the synopsis you find tags for ''harem'' and ''romance''. How does that combine?

Grammar definitely not the best. I find the concept of the story fairly interesting but besides that it can only be seen as cliche the characters are extremely shallow to the point where every character is basically the same character. For example any males in the story that are around the MCs age are extremely prideful and arrogant. They are always in love with the princess around them and always tries to beat down the MC which the princesses are in love with for no apparent reason other than the MC existing. Also all the princesses or members of the stupid harem are basically the same character or a cliche. Next the society in the Novel makes no sense, apparently everyone is basically fine with some random mediocre butler marrying a princess. Basically there is no noble society or any kind of political environment within the kingdoms, also there is no formality at all to the point where a king could casually make a meeting between Kings and address them in a light hearted and casual manner. Then there is no political consequences for any of their actions which doesn't make any sense. In summary this is just a decent concept but poorly written and poorly done.

Definitely, very weak novel in terms of characters. Characters felt like they don't stay in their roles and especially princess characters. I'm pretty sure it is illogical for Butler waking up princess. Feel like weird. It has the vibe of Chinese novels but I enjoyed them a lot so there are no problems for me. The novel is readable for me but there are a lot of misspellings that make the novel hard to understand. Well, there are a lot of weaknesses here and there but it's a great read. I give it a try because it's Harem plus Butler. Nevertheless, it is a good read.