Reincarnated With The Undefeated System
Do you know what it feels like to get shot in the face? A bullet straight to the face?
Yeah, it's a type of quick death where you wouldn't have to feel much pain, but I'm sure most people wouldn't love to die that way...
..But that's exactly how Aiden died. He was shot in the face by the leader of the gang he was in, and it was instant death for him. He joined a gang due to the troubles of life, the unfairness of life, and that's what caused his death.
But that wasn't the end for Aiden. After meeting with the demi-gods and choosing a path, he passed through the cycle of reincarnation and was reborn as a baby into a world where superpowers exist...
..A world where your power element determines how far you'll go, a world where not everyone gets to possess an ability, a world where magical beasts exist.
Aiden would have to survive in this world, he'll have to become stronger to do that, he'll have to awaken an ability. Luckily for him, he was granted something no one else possesses...
[ Ding! Ding!]
[ You've been granted the Undefeated System]
With this system, Aiden can become stronger by conquering females, by banging them. This was gonna be of big help to him, the Undefeated System was gonna take him far.
His journey begins...
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Disclaimer: Because the title says 'The Undefeated System' doesn't mean the MC is gonna become instant OP, it's gonna be a journey to greatness with character development.
The title says, 'The Undefeated System'. Now, this system is gonna make him undefeatable in two ways. It's gonna make him undefeatable in battle and when conquering a female on bed or whatever style they choose to have sex.
Having sex with a girl can be a battle sometimes. Either she conquers you, or you conquer her. This system was gonna make him win all the time.
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Writing quality: 2 stars At least iits readable I guess? The other is a bumbling idiot. he does not know when to zip it when it comes to describing. he repeats himself a lot and its honestly irritating especially when its coming from an author with three novels in his belt. Story development: 1 star Its bad... It's real bad... The story is slow and boring, and I could barely get through 30 chaps to make this review. The pacing reminds of watching a baby trying to walk, which is ironic since the mc seems to have been a toddler his whole life. Character Design: 1 star. Just no... mc is a baby, and all other characters are stupid. COME ONE AUTHOR! YOU'VE WRITTEN THREE BOOKS! i would give this category Zero stars if I could. Update stability: 5 stars Its good. 10 chapters a week. The problem is that despite creating so many chapters a week, its worth nothing when u write garbage. world background: 1 star The power system is atrocious. It makes no sense and its overly complicated. why use the lettering system when they can literally just say the element instead? also, the lettering system is really jumbled up. A is somehow the lowest, while D is like the second highest? what?! unique but it doesn't matter when it doesn't make sense. Overall: just bad. 2 stars don't recommend. I suggest the author drops this and starts reading novels for a change. Maybe then he will know how to make a good novel and keep it alive for longer than 15 chapters. the author deleted my last review so here is a new one.
The story starts off too slowly, and after reading ahead I can't say the payoff is worth it. The first chapter is basically an info dump telling (not showing) you how unfortunate the MC is before you even have a chance to learn more about him, much less care about him. It almost feels like the writer is trying to guilt you into pitying the character without doing the groundwork needed. There are also problems with messy punctuation, needless repetition that feels like padding, and bad vocabulary. The story is readable, but comes across as rather soulless.
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repeats same sentence over and over about being shot in the face one time is enough we don't need to read it 100 timea
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It is possibly the most boring novel on webnovel. Author writes like a grade schooler, at best. Sentence structure, context, and vocabulary are headache inducing. Character development is non-existent. The concept is the only good thing about this novel. If it was written by someone else, it could be great.
grammar is bad the placements of commas are bad it's barely readable story is alright overall 4/10 i guess it wouldn't be so low if the commas weren't messed up one of such examples are "the first thing she did after entering the house was to go cuddle, little aiden" when it should be "the first thing she did after entering was to go cuddle little aiden" it may not seem like a big deal, but it's very frustrating to read and it wasn't filled with redundant sentences
It had potential but the translation with primary school writing it flopped so hard
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WQ 3stars SD 4stars CD 3stars US 4stars WB 3stars The book so far is an ok read, the author just needs to polish it
Кусок гавна а не произведение... Персонажи умственно отсталые, включая MC, мир картона, автор по 3-4 раза пишет одну и туже мысль, грамматика отсутствует, история развивается очень медленно, если это можно назвать развитием
This review can be summed up in two words….. Don’t bother. Typical reincarnation novel, bullied male, dies and is reborn in a medieval type society with magic as a cornerstone. The author repeatedly comments that he is a reborn 24 year old guy in a babies body, then eventually a 7 year old boy. Using this as an excuse for much of his actions, the story becomes a snorefest. After reading 33 chapters, he is still 7 years and I feel his IQ has bottomed so much it hurts to read further. Funny enough I noticed a comment at chapter 33, another reader had enough as well 🤦🏻♂️ Overall this could have been resolved by devoting probably 2-3 chapters to early years then introduce a time skip to about 16-17. Might have made it more palatable to read this drivel. TL;dr…. Don’t waste your time or FPs on this (I only read this as it was free today)
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