Billionaire, Who are you?
Wearing a Luxurious silver-white suit, expensive brown leather shoes, and black sunglasses.
A very sophisticated man and strikingly cold domineering figure driving Shelby Ford mustang GT 65's arrived at the build of Stratton Industries located along with top-class buildings at Stanford Business Center.
All of the employees and executive are in front of the building formed a straight line waiting for the heir of the company,
Joseph Randal went out of his amazing car and all of the women eyes were glaring and admiring the look of a very handsome man standing in front of them
Everyone is bent down 90-degree position and then suddenly a greeting in unison can be heard loudly at the business center.
My name is Robert Collins, A year ago I was a simple man living with my wife and son,
When tragic events happened, My father-in-law, Manager of the bank, and Owner of Foster Commercial Center connived to chase me out of the office.
On the verge of death, I found a strength to fight and escape from death, and fortunately, I was saved by a Billionaire man who happened to have the same destiny as me.
He adopted me and transfer all his wealth but I need to inherit his Son name Joseph Randal to smoothly avenge my family and live with them happily.
”Hi! everyone I’m a beginner it is my first time writing a novel so please I need your criticism in order to improve, Thanks!”
-Joseph Percol
The plot line is really unique. Your writing style is good too, it's direct and clear. But I would suggest you to split some sentences and separate them because they tend to become too wordy and sometimes a bit confusing. Apart from that, it's a really interesting read. Keep up the good work!
Well, you need to improve the settings and such describe with 5 senses avoid to direct storytelling put feelings make the MC react :D also keep writing it improves the more you go so I await the further publishment
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