Pokemon Alternate Universe Adventures

One of the best pokemon fanfic I have ever seen have potential to be the no1 pokemon fanfic if the story continues as it is & an increase in updates.Waiting for more

The story is honestly getting boring. After 110 chapters the story still hasnt progressed to the main part. The mc is still 4 years old. Much time is wasted by explaining his daily life or just some random item he finds, that arent really good. The plot would be really good if the author would reduce it to the important encounters. For example 4 chapters were used to describe the mc going to the beach and describing the pokemon that life there (just marills,…)

This story has three main problems for menthat ruin it. The first is the absolute info dumps. It is good that the authir is putting in the work to make everything understanding but it is way too much info. The second is how incredibly slow paced it is. It seems that the author does not want to speed up the story, but he has the protagonist doing expiriments at two years old. Just time skip to when he leaves it would be so much more interesting that a 100 chapter prologue. That last thing is the terrible dialogue. It is so forced and unnatural that it is a but painful to read. Instead of a normal back and forth dialougue between characters they say everything to the person in one sentence and the other party responds in one long sentence. I think if the author just spends less time on backround info fixed the conversations and just put in a couple of timeskips until he reached the age to start his journey this book would be improved

Until chap 12 (Acutual) is one of the best FF of pokemon by far, everything is explained and logical, you have my thx for this masterpiece :) ( usually I am pretty harsh with reviews)

A bit boring, to graphomanic, but overall is fine i guess comparing to other pokemon ff, however "master of tactics" is much more interesting

Though it is great and interesting, the amount of info dump is mortifying . . . .

I was so bored by this novel that i actually started studying for once in my life. info dumps galore, half of each chapter is allocated to info dumps it's incredibly annoying to read, the pacing of the novel is horribly slow barely anything happens in a chapter other than getting blasted with info dumps. you might think a slow pacing isn't always bad but in this case it is, since you have to read a paragraph of info dumps followed by a paragraph of the most boring slice of life and the only thing he skips are the Pokémon battles which is mind boggling to have a pokemon novel that just skips over the majority of battles but goes into detail about every nook and cranny of the world like an encyclopedia. the author really doesn't respect your time.

you can clearly see the effort of the author in this novel not only in the grammar but the details and the choice of mc "cheats". author dont simple chose and write without think in the future troubles that choice will have on the world. we can't forget while the first 10-11 chapters are info dump mc tried to write in a way that people that dont like can tolerate it(as a info dump lover I don't know if I'm being biased). This novel entered in top 10 of all Pokemon fanfic together with :1- Sacrifice and Subjugation by MetalDargon ,2- The Natural by lightningwarrior215, 3- Ascension by The BlackStaff and NightMarE, 4- Traveler by The Straight Elf, 5- Born Of Caution by Fuggmann, 6- Cobalt to Coal to Diamond by KyKyuKai, 7- Welcome to the (insane) world of Pokemon by CaptainMoonshine, 8- Pokemon Jordinio Version! by 0 Jordinio 0, 9- Chalenger by darkfire1220 and finally 10- Conquer by Twubs that now this fic take the place. with this you can see how much I love this

I don't understand who the demographic for this novel is.. its like 500 chapters of fanfic info dumps. it would be like reading an incorrect version of the Pokémon wiki. The mc is a child for basically the entire novel which I always find weird. I get its a Pokémon fic but why are we reading about his breast feeding days for like 50 chapters. This is all before I mention the cultivation nonsense the author adds. It's like this novel is a weird Chinese Pokémon AU wiki page. Baited so hard with these xp/fake reviews.

From what I read so far, which is admittedly not too much because there are 2 chapters out at the moment, the story seems to be interesting. I hope it keeps being interesting in the future and i am eagerly waiting for new chapters.

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Easily one of the best Pokemon fan fics. By far the best take on the whole Pokemon potential system that most fanfics have. The only downside is how slow it is.

overall thoughts: It's incredibly mid (mediocre) (in debth review) -(criticism) as of 550, his writing seems to be allergic to providing details and gives too much information at the same time. he is lazy in his use of adding other fictional characters and every character has no complexity. the mentor characters are benevolent powerful characters that are entirely selfless and talk the same way as each other. selflessness is a common theme among characters. the author babies you in general throughout the book. everyone of his characters falls into either 1. it's the cut and paste mc but with a different appearance. or 2. they are a shallow ghost of a character. often the author will repeat the same things over and over. the pokemon training times are inconsistent. the parents trained new pokemon faster than the years when they were on their journey, their improvement got close to, if not, rivaled mc's pokemon training time with his space. the dialog is rather terrible, people talk too much in one go and the responses are generalized. the dialog doesn't flow and the characters are unnatural when speaking. some of the dialog really made me cringe with how unnatural the actions taken were the author doesn't understand and underestimates intelligence and so the main character is of above average intelligence in the clothes of borderline genius. the system gives out too much unnecessary information. the mc has no had any conflicts that trully gave him pause (compliments) author did a great job in not being terrible, many novels made by amateur novelists are cringe and hard to read, not the case here. I didn't have to think overly hard while reading. a lot of the decisions the main character makes actually make sense. the author seems to know what he wants out of his story. the best part of all is the fact the author hasn't lost motivation to write which is admirable. (improvements) add comparisons, they will help give a visualization to the reader. streamline the system info, to much info becomes monotonous to read. don't list measurements, use comparisons, let us use our imagination read up on intelligence, the way you sell your character is smarter than you have shown us. show don't tell, people don't like to be babied so you provide clues on instead of outright giving away everything. the dialog needs to flow and become more natural. ease up with pleasantries and spelling when writing informal speech, not everyone pronounces full words. people will play with words that go beyond what is proper. people are complex. motivations differ, surprise shows differently on people, people go through combinations of emotions. you need to separate your characters personality . their personality are too close to each other. give your mc something/ someone to struggle with, a roadblock of some kind. there is nothing to push the story in an interesting direction. keep consistency with the timings.

so we have a decent writing, massive word count, consistent updates and a detailed world background. On Paper this might sound a good catch, but no, it feels like a chore reading this. 0 story development at all, it's a classic case of all tell and zero show. I can't see an ounce of Pokemon vibe here. Author made everything seem realistic and that's not just Pokemon, I want to feel the magic and nostalgia, not some info dumps that no fan ever bothered to know or care about.