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i gave myself a 5/5 because i can
6 years ago
4
lets_get_this_rice
Really like how wonderfully detailed your story is! The development so far seems to go in a good directions, and I am really excited for more!
However, maybe working a little bit on making the sentences more fluid with each other would definitely improve the overall quality.
You do have a rich vocabulary, and I belive that is a strong point to always remember using.
Overall, this is great! Keep it up! :)
6 years ago
1
Jamison_C
The author has a rich vocabulary as evidence by his sentence variation.
Would suggest improving readability as there are quite a number of long sentences in the recent chapters.
All the best!
6 years ago
1
Sophie_Duken
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2 years ago
0
niddaii
Hey there!
Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
4 years ago
0
ShaNnia
Hey there!
Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
4 years ago
0
prisslez75
Great great story...love the way the author clearly chose his vocabulary and the sci-fic combo is just lit....I read this one over and over again...waiting for more of your amazing stories💯♥️👌
4 years ago
0
Daoist179253
Another hidden gem 💎 of webnovel, with some polishing it'll shine. Great story, great potential. Hope to read more. Love the combo of sci-fi and magic looking forward to further development.
5 years ago
0
Chryiss
I’m going to be extremely honest. As much as I love dungeons and all sorts of fantasy elements, I wasn’t so keen on reading all the dungeon battling. It felt a little lengthy. However, you had a lot of good details on characters’ actions and gave clear info on the world (building).
The characters are described physically well, but in order to connect to the audience more, details on how they feel and think more in situations would give insight on their personality.
The last suggestion would be to brush up on punctuation rules. There was a lot of run on sentences that needed commas. Also, “i” was not capitalized as well as other words. Lack of capitalizing stands out too much in writing, so once this is fixed, your writing will immediately be more professional.
6 years ago
0
smith41
6 n no system were is the system??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
6 years ago
0
asdasdanaertuy
hola, espero que continue la novela y pueda el escritor logar muchos capitulos, es un poco sencilla pero creo que tiene futuro. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
read my book read my book read my book read my book read my book read my book read my book read my book read my book i gave myself a 5/5 because i can
Really like how wonderfully detailed your story is! The development so far seems to go in a good directions, and I am really excited for more! However, maybe working a little bit on making the sentences more fluid with each other would definitely improve the overall quality. You do have a rich vocabulary, and I belive that is a strong point to always remember using. Overall, this is great! Keep it up! :)
The author has a rich vocabulary as evidence by his sentence variation. Would suggest improving readability as there are quite a number of long sentences in the recent chapters. All the best!
RECOVER LOST FUNDS,//RECOVERY MASTERS Many decisions made by top notch investors made many of them fall into the wrong hands, I was once a victim too After being persuaded to invest $197,600 in a bogus Investment platform. I was however in disbelief after finding out this was all scam.I almost lost hope since all this funds was my last savings, but with the recommendations and referral gotten from friends, I was able to retrieve back my funds in a span of 42 hrs.Thanks to the expertise Recovery Masters on email address (Recoverymasters @ email.cz ) they were exceptionally awesome.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
Great great story...love the way the author clearly chose his vocabulary and the sci-fic combo is just lit....I read this one over and over again...waiting for more of your amazing stories💯♥️👌
Another hidden gem 💎 of webnovel, with some polishing it'll shine. Great story, great potential. Hope to read more. Love the combo of sci-fi and magic looking forward to further development.
I’m going to be extremely honest. As much as I love dungeons and all sorts of fantasy elements, I wasn’t so keen on reading all the dungeon battling. It felt a little lengthy. However, you had a lot of good details on characters’ actions and gave clear info on the world (building). The characters are described physically well, but in order to connect to the audience more, details on how they feel and think more in situations would give insight on their personality. The last suggestion would be to brush up on punctuation rules. There was a lot of run on sentences that needed commas. Also, “i” was not capitalized as well as other words. Lack of capitalizing stands out too much in writing, so once this is fixed, your writing will immediately be more professional.
6 n no system were is the system??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
hola, espero que continue la novela y pueda el escritor logar muchos capitulos, es un poco sencilla pero creo que tiene futuro. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++