ZeroFive

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look I'm going to be honest the summary drew me in it really did but when I started reading it I was confused. you had 2 or 3 chapters of explaining the system that could have been one, you had him be dead from the polls and used 2 or three chapters again that could have been one, then you didn't introduce the nieces the story on what it's about the uncle and the nieces until chapter 11 I believe I couldn't read anymore after that. half of the story is nothing but filler and I understand you have set a place for the characters but not 7 or so chapters that's just filler. I dont know if he even meet the nieces or not because I just couldn't read it after chapter 11 or whatever chapter the nieces were introduced by cameo. dont gey me started on that system that took his soul like yeah I searched for you and took half your soul are you okay with that

the story is good but, sigh. its so tiring to read for example, when its explaining how the system function works it takes 2-3 chapters or sometimes it just go around and around before he fet to the point, what usually need 1 sentence to explain become 2-3 sentence or almost a chapter. i like the story but unfortunately not the writing and the system too.

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