In Marvel as Superman

Writing Quality - 3 Story Development - 2, Ancient One's puppet and cliche school drama. Character Design- 2, No conversations no nothing. How am I supposed to rate this? He's barely had any interactions in 10-11 chs. He also cries for every little thing. Updating Stability- I don't know about this Since it already has 30-40 chs So ill just give it a 5. World Background- Trash. Decide if it's DC or Marvel first.

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This is on another level of edge. I'll explain in a second, but first. Writing quality: It's not as bad as some other fics that can be found on this site, but the dialogues and everything feel bare. It's like reading an unfinished script. Updating stability: Pretty consistent, few fics can reach over 100 chapters, and each chapter is decently long for this site. Character design: Never liked the whole blue, red and outside underwear Superman has, I like this. World background & Plot: Ohhh dear. This is, it's just bad. It's like seeing a twelve years old kid trying to write something gritty and edgy, and watching as he fails spectacularly. Mentions of r@pe, pedophiles are plenty, but it's made cheap by the reveal, feels incredibly insincere. It's what me of 7 years ago would have written. Overall: I give this a 2.4, it would have been lower, but I feel like the author is trying, but his story is lacking direction

Really like this novel, the MC made some good and realistc wishes, i like how author Make a realistic Marvel where cosmic beings and entitys are really aware of MC's actions and power, not like other novels where we Barely see cosmic beings and is Just lady death to be in the harem Really good novel keep the good work

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I like the idea and the story that you are writing, however the actual thing feels and reads like the notes you use when planning your story, it would be best to go back to the start and flesh everything out, also use " " for speech that's what you use them for.

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I see... Still needs improvement and a lot of better information about some characters. Sometimes the Author underestimate and overestimate some Marvel characters, and even the One Above All, Author underestimates the power of that Multiverse's creator. The MC even underestimates himself sometimes...

It's not that good, unfortunately. The idea is good but the implementation failed. It jumps from event to event it hardly feels like Marvel as there is hardly any interaction. He talks about being a hero and preventing the Avengers from becoming like Earth 616, but completely skips over everything. Now in DC and Ben 10 and you get as a small between note that he has taken care of almost all the problem e.g. Magneto. Or that he is in doubt whether the people deserve rescue etc.. But you have not seen any hero action except for the beginning. My tip to you is: Make a proper concept for the story with a constant story line and don't skip from event to event.

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7 chapters in and there hasnt been a line of dialogue with anyone other than the god. This story is the epitome of tell, not show. Very difficult and dry to read

First things first ignore the hatemongers for somebody just writing, for a fan fiction awesome keep trying to get better. little shallow but that's okay put out your story the way you want to. For the haters bunch of loud mouth mfers who haven't written a single thing show us you can do better consistently or shut up and try to be constructive.

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