Danmachi: Reincarnation With System

beautifully written fanfic, except for one thing: water. there's too much of it. it feels like I'm reading a Chinese novel about cultivation, which describes every day of his being in meditation for 100 years. too much unnecessary and not timely inserted information. information about the world itself stretched over sooooooooo many chapters. so there isn't much that's really new in this piece. read 20 chapters. I see no point in reading further. Google translate.

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This is a copy from a chinnense fanfic named 混迹在地错世界的卑鄙外乡人 who had 620 chapter Is the same history he just change the name of mc the other are the same

Wow!, after a long time, I find a potential danmachi fic. Writing quality is also good for me as my native isn't English, and I didn't need a god-level grammar. *sigh...I just hope, one day my writing skills will at your level. And yeah nothing to say, as there are only a few chapters uploaded and yeah author did you use any app for editing grammar or paraphrasing the paragraph Go forward Author-san.

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my review after 17 chapters. writing quality five stars because I have yet to see some grammatical error, sentences that could cause some misunderstandings, or misspellings. Story development five stars because the plot of the novel is not so forced or have plotholes. nothing too generic so far, or forced romance and etc. Hoping that these trend continue. 3 star character design, because the original work except the authors OC is others art, so lets respect the Original Artist for his works. Updating Stability five stars because according to your stats at updating seems pretty stable at one chap a day. World background three stars because again, just a respect for the original creator of Danmachi universe.

Stop with the exclamation marks it is ruining the dialogue of the story

So I am giving this a 4.8 review, but really I want to give it 5 but there is still some problem in the writing quality, but that can be improved and it's not like it is not understandable. So this is a fanfic of Danmachi as the title says and I can say that this is one of my favorite fanfic of danmachi, and what I like about this fanfic is first the Mc joined the Loki Familia. Because you see other fanfic even though they reincarnated and know about the story and know that loki familia is a good familia they still choose the lower level familia and because of that the mc face problem. But it's not like I don't like that it's just you see if I was the Mc and I know the story I will join where I will have a good background and since I know loki familia is a friendly familia to it's member I will definitely join it, also back to where the other fanfic Mc chose the weak familia you can expect that Apolo familia will have a conflict with the mc because of Apolo taking A liking to Mc. So back to the review the story development I think it was pretty good I don't have a problem to it, and it also has some comedy on it that brings you laugh. In character design I also don't have a problem with the Mc but I will still wait for his further Character Development. In the world background even though I gave this five star it is because this is a fanfic and I think you got it right and cool, but I also expect you to add some mystery to it, I think that will hook more readers like is the mc randomly reincarnated or there is something happening that will make me have shivers after realising it. You see I read many good novels but only a few give this shiver after realising the plot so I am expecting something from you Author. Really good luck and wish you to continue this.

This is just a general question... why did you put a system into a danmachi world when there is one already ?

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