Tatsumi Uzumaki was tranmigrated as a member of the Uzumaki clan.How will he survive his clans impending doom will he run away and abandon his clan or will he he lead his clan to overcome all its adversaries.
U should use quotation marks more and space out ur paragraphs because this is all a mess to read. U should also use a symbol of sorts to show who's talking and who's not.
2 years ago
7
Hsaet_Uchiha
some grammar mistakes and space between worlds need to be fixed . And a little bit of an annoying concept and dissention make me leave. overall 3.8
a year ago
2
FiLL88
2 years ago
2
Travis_Bray
I really like this book hope you keep it up mu only problem is the chapters are to short but I understand you are busy with other things keep it up
2 years ago
1
nexusstar21
please comment I would like to hear your suggestion on things I should add or change in this fanfic
2 years ago
1
Pedro_Santos_3738
Really bad writing quality.
Story is rushed over all nothing is explained in a coherent manner.
Character development is 0 we do not even know the MC parents.
It is just one of the worse overall I have read unfortunately .
System in which mission failure will kill the MC but somehow he is still arrogant what a joke
a year ago
0
kirill_Boldyrev
Рассказ слишком не интересный и шаблоный, Было бы интересно смотреть, как он в одиночку всех побеждает, а не как у всех. Типо Гг набирает силы, качает союзников.
И в итоге разделяет и тратит свое время впустую. Да, я понимаю, что союзники тоже важны, но тут дело в том, что Гг мог улучшить себя до такой степени, что не один враг не смог бы его победить. Но мы получаем, что Гг качает союзников и тратит время. Отсюда и вылазит эта шаблонка и пустой сюжет. Дальше 10 главы читать уже нет смысла, ведь ты уже понимаешь, что будет дальше и теряешь интрес.
a year ago
0
Jack_Reaper_9612
I don't recommend it because, the newbie package was to much , and he start the story to when the Uzumaki clan still exist, not even the anime have much information about Uzumaki clan I already dropp it at chapter 1
a year ago
0
Qwerttipper
Seems like a translation without credit to the original author or a re-upload of a faloo novel. Anyways, this book is just the authors fantasy of powers he thinks are op and does not create any original techniques or powers.
a year ago
0
Kabuk5
Two chapters was enough to decide that without a team of betas going over this story, it is unreadable, the ideas might be good, but the flow is as broken as the paragraphs are.
a year ago
0
White_Fox_1647
basically shouldn't oncoming compound chicken flux smog and about dank show about skid disc skid skid door so FL all FL FL FL listings dynamic snacks
a year ago
0
Mastersun
the idea is cool, well, the writing of the story itself is similar to the fact that one of your friends tells you this story and not you read it, well, good luck to the author and thank you for his work
U should use quotation marks more and space out ur paragraphs because this is all a mess to read. U should also use a symbol of sorts to show who's talking and who's not.
some grammar mistakes and space between worlds need to be fixed . And a little bit of an annoying concept and dissention make me leave. overall 3.8
I really like this book hope you keep it up mu only problem is the chapters are to short but I understand you are busy with other things keep it up
please comment I would like to hear your suggestion on things I should add or change in this fanfic
Really bad writing quality. Story is rushed over all nothing is explained in a coherent manner. Character development is 0 we do not even know the MC parents. It is just one of the worse overall I have read unfortunately . System in which mission failure will kill the MC but somehow he is still arrogant what a joke
Рассказ слишком не интересный и шаблоный, Было бы интересно смотреть, как он в одиночку всех побеждает, а не как у всех. Типо Гг набирает силы, качает союзников. И в итоге разделяет и тратит свое время впустую. Да, я понимаю, что союзники тоже важны, но тут дело в том, что Гг мог улучшить себя до такой степени, что не один враг не смог бы его победить. Но мы получаем, что Гг качает союзников и тратит время. Отсюда и вылазит эта шаблонка и пустой сюжет. Дальше 10 главы читать уже нет смысла, ведь ты уже понимаешь, что будет дальше и теряешь интрес.
I don't recommend it because, the newbie package was to much , and he start the story to when the Uzumaki clan still exist, not even the anime have much information about Uzumaki clan I already dropp it at chapter 1
Seems like a translation without credit to the original author or a re-upload of a faloo novel. Anyways, this book is just the authors fantasy of powers he thinks are op and does not create any original techniques or powers.
Two chapters was enough to decide that without a team of betas going over this story, it is unreadable, the ideas might be good, but the flow is as broken as the paragraphs are.
basically shouldn't oncoming compound chicken flux smog and about dank show about skid disc skid skid door so FL all FL FL FL listings dynamic snacks
the idea is cool, well, the writing of the story itself is similar to the fact that one of your friends tells you this story and not you read it, well, good luck to the author and thank you for his work