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I’m giving you five stars—not for the quality of the work itself, but in recognition of your dedication and perseverance in reaching +200 chapters. That’s a rare achievement and a testament to your commitment to writing. However, after reading 20 chapters, I found several major issues that made it difficult for me to continue. These are key areas you should focus on improving in your future works. 1 Pacing and Narrative Depth The story progresses too quickly without delving deeply into the characters or their backgrounds. This makes it hard for readers to connect with them emotionally or understand their motivations. Characters need time and space to develop organically within the narrative. 2 The Main Character The protagonist comes across as overly simplistic and naive—traits that feel out of place for an adult character. To make your main character more compelling, consider the following: Ensure they have a mature and critical outlook on the world around them. Give them a charismatic presence—one of the easiest ways to achieve this is by incorporating wit and sarcasm into their dialogue. Establish a clear goal from the beginning, rooted in their backstory. Ideally, a tragic past can serve as a strong driving force. 3 Writing Style and Readability The formatting of chapters and writing style currently make it difficult to fully immerse in the story. It feels as if the story is targeted at a younger audience or non-native English readers. To improve, work on enhancing descriptions, enriching the language, and avoiding oversimplification. 4 Worldbuilding You can simplify worldbuilding by drawing inspiration from well-known fictional worlds (Westeros from Game of Thrones, Avatar, Harry Potter, Made in Abyss), then reshaping them into something uniquely your own. However, it’s crucial to introduce world elements gradually through the protagonist’s observations or interactions with supporting characters rather than dumping all the information at once. 5- Plot and Story Structure Building a strong plot can be one of the most challenging aspects of writing, but as a beginner, you can approach it similarly to worldbuilding—by merging elements from different stories into something fresh. For example, you could take the world of Lord of the Mysteries, remove the church system, replace it with magic guilds, introduce magical towers and dungeons, and give the cities a more technologically advanced feel. You could also introduce a "land abandoned by the gods," transforming it into a "dark continent" that serves as the source of all evil. The story could revolve around the protagonist and their team trying to prevent entities from this continent from breaching the barrier protecting the human world. Final Despite these criticisms, I can see that you have the passion and dedication necessary to improve. With time and effort, your writing will evolve. Focus on deepening character development, refining your style, and strengthening your plot, and you’ll eventually be able to craft a truly exceptional story.

hello guys it's me the author of this novel Namleess_3, I really hope you enjoy this novel and don't get your expectations up because this is my first time writing a novel. and I didn't really put much planning into this novel, I just wrote it because i wanted someone experience before I write the novels i actually planned and developed.

The only reason i gave this 2 star is because it's your first novel.