Carefree Path of a Wondering Stranger

It has some potential but I'm just gonna state everything I think Is wrong with this fanfic 1. It lacks realisticness like this man is doing stuff beyond human capabilities yet they keep saying he dosent have a quirk also they dont question him bringing yachiru to school at all 2. Your writing is to clumped up together you need to space some of it apart and do punctuation I recommend grammarly it's a app that would help you alot 3. All his abilities and spirits are too much especially If bleach fans read this I think you should give more detail and explain each spirit and abilities like I am and anime only fan for bleach So I dont know anything about ywache yet and hollow black so it would be nice if you could explain the abilities in detail 4. I think the mc personality is lacking and too care free so I think if you make him more aggressive it would be better So this is all I have for you if you fix these things it would be golden

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Based on things you've said in the past I was expecting far more from you, for shame author, for shame. Perfect example, I never understood how some people who read suddenly forget how things should be formated when they write there own. You've disappointed me.

I will be honest I was liking the story, when I saw the tags I thought maybe this won't be a harem, and how wrong I was, in the end, harem is just not my cup of tea. If you don't mind the harem the give it a try, I think it is worth at least that much. Author I won't keep reading but I wish you all the best!

Overall a good story. Plus very few spelling mistakes. The protagonist uses his powers fully and doesn't take his powers for granted and in constant progression of bettering himself. Plus the plot caries on smoothly to become the most OP ever.

Ok I havr read Until chapter 15 and l’m disappointed and confused I mean my guy was an assassin a cold killer yet he isn’t acting like one and then he meets momo and the rest then BAMM there in love like what in the living ****is this please explain too me

To be honest, I didn't like the job. Like why ask for the power of Yahweh and not use them. Alo world "My Hero Academy" is a weak world, mc should already be the strongest there. And his interactions with the characters are just awful, almost no full-fledged dialogue. And when the author told us his background, I was expecting a cold mc, and here he answers everyone with such a friendly

Am giving you 5 * but to be honest am very disappointed 😞 in you on the way you develop the story D I S A P P O I N T E D 😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞

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A good story idea, being a hero with yhwach abilities, but it became boring because there are no interactions at all. Everything about training. He went to training and then trained. He went to school. He fought and took second place and returned to training. There is no talk that makes a realistic story, no reactions, nothing. Moved straight to the next fight. We didn't see anyone's response. Briefly contains many loopholes that would have made a great story. You probably didn't want to make connections because he would leave the world. So what's the point of watching if we don't have fun? You should do your best to make the story realistic and believable before you do. Anything

One of the major problems I have with the MC is that the author tagged the novel as having SelfishMC but he keeps saving people time and time again when he has nothing to gain from it. Selfish - (of a person, action, or motive) lacking consideration for other people; concerned chiefly with one's own personal profit or pleasure. "I joined them for selfish reasons".

Honestly one of the best system in the MHA world fanfictions coz the mc was OP everyone knew he was OP but they still tried to look down on Jim coz he was quirk less which I found realistic. The only reason that I only gave it a 4🌟 in story development was that the mc made a big speech about him clawing his was from the bottom to survive and save the child he picked up but didn't even consider saving eri ahead of time.

This is a heavily invest on gaming system isekai mc. Starting from MHA with his main system as bleach at the moment. A very strong mc yet he didn't fight for real, ever. Kind of like superman that love to abuse himself by fighting in opponent prowess level...

I’ve never red something so stupid in all my life. Mc has nearly every power in bleach(even ywach) and decide to use a gun. everything stupid. Mc personality doesn’t match what was said in chapter 1. In the sports festival, mc was slightly moved by a finger flick of deku when mc has 12.5 million weights on. The whole novel is irritating.