A Trap in a Lewd Dungeon

love it but why do we need to pay after so few chapter TwT

Writing Quality is average, there are mistakes, but they are occasional few.Story Development tho is all over the place tho super random, first of all the POV changes are very ambiguous causing much confusion, then the MC'S random aggressive methods with the soldiers feels super forced and kinda needless. Story Development for me is kinda below average.Character Design, well it's OK ish like they ain't very complex nor 1D I think, honestly talking about Character after just 16 chaps is difficult .Updates, no idea.World Background who knows, I think it's earth tho, author hasn't really been clear with this.

you know what a bad end for our mc should be getting funded by the protagonist lol

man what can I say I am not able to follow the storyline.

I have no clue what is going on in half the chapters, seems like key information is being forgotten and the story jumps around wayyy too much

I literally have no idea what's happening. The POVs change without warning, the world building is bad and most of the characters have no personality.

I won’t waste too much time on this review, which is abnormal for me, but lets begin. The author killed their own story, everything went out the window around chapter 13 (if I remember correctly). The story was progressing wonderfully, then all of a sudden, the author just decided to change everything they set up? It really felt like more of a betrayal, the author switched up last minute, then also you have to pay after like 16 chaps. I don’t know if the author had a hand in that as well, but if they did, all I can say is they absolutely butchered what could have been a good read.

This gif perfectly sums up this story. A plot idea stays for about 2 chapters and then unceremoniously dropped, never to be relevant again.

The best I have read in a few weeks. I recommend.

everything about it is wrong.we do not where the story is going or what is happening.even if i try and read a chapter more than once it is still not enough....the story is broken t all places....and nothing seem to make sense.

i'm 10 chapters in, writing quality isn't bad as i haven't really spotted any grammar mistakes but i did spot a few random gibberish like "goi nn g" not unbearable as it doesn't happen often. Story development? well all i can say its heading in the right direction hehe~. Character design?there is a few things missing here mainly physical description as i would hope he adds more to it so it gets easier to create a mental picture of the character, other than that it is pretty solid. World background, there is brief description about the world, but since i'm only on 10th chapter i can't say much in this aspects, but i'll still give it a 5 star since i think it'll do good from what i've read so far, soo give it a try~ {enjoy reader~}

Not much information was given and half the chapters aren’t even about the mc but different unnecessary POVs the mc never really had much character development and the story develops weirdly. I could go on all day which is why I dropped this.

I don’t know what this guy/girl is doing they are all over the place