i'm crying this is really good... the harem tag terrifies me tho........................................................................................
3 years ago
201
TFH
2.8 Stars... well... the author tries very hard to explain the universe but in most chapters, over 80% of it is an info dump, 15% explains the current situation and the other 5% is dialog. If i wanted to read about the Star Wars LORE, i would check the star wars fandom.
3 years ago
89
JokerHighJack
I dont get why people like this. The whole time i have been reading i feel like i have just been reading a wiki copy and paste with no originality
3 years ago
69
Driod324
Where did the book go it was great
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3 years ago
40
John_Smith_5018
garbage, there is zero character development and the protagonist presents no major challenges, the harem takes up a good excuse to make it look so good that there is virtually no questioning.
3 years ago
38
Plug_O_Stien
Listen, I don't really like making reviews, because it's time-consuming. But I think it's worth doing every now and then. To start, the introduction to the story, the opener, is rather bland and generic, nothing special, that is not very impactful to the story apart from maybe deterring some potential readers. The writing quality is pretty much non-existent, the author as of chapter 28 is just dumping information, there is almost no dialogue, and when there is, it feels unnatural and just overall poorly executed, clearly highlighting their total lack of basic writing knowledge. The story feels more like a summary of events that transpired rather than actually, well... actually writing a story itself. It feels like a journal with entries telling us what he did instead of actually reading about it in-depth, experiencing it for ourselves so to speak. Overall, writing quality is given a 1 star. That leads me to my next point, the MC has zero depth. no character progression, his aspirations are generic and his actions clearly betray the intentions of the author as he attempts to establish the reasons to build the MC's harem. His quest to build his empire is rather boring and lacks a real reason, meaning well-developed intentions and driving factors to realistically pursue such a path. Stability is not discussed since the story is done. story development, terribly paced, no depth to the story, everything is very poorly executed, and events are skipped over which doesn't allow us to immerse ourselves in the story. It's practically impossibly to actually attach myself to the story because it's too shallow. I have come to the conclusion that the author lacks the ability to actually delve into the story in detail because he doesn't have the necessary imagination and skill to build a functioning world, highlighting the intricacies, expand on his plots and develop characters. Nor does he have the necessary information to develop it in a way that is sensible and correct in terms of lore. The last part is understandable to a certain degree due to all the retcons, and the absurd attention to detail needed to be factually correct making it very daunting. adding this to the author being an amateur in writing creates this novel that culminates in a summary of canonical events with slight changes and a pinch of originality. story development 1 star. character design, MC is bland, nothing special about him at all, his dialogue is incredibly crude and badly done, and his interactions with other characters are inaccurate and unrealistic. An example is his interactions with Mother Talzin, a perfect example to highlight the author's clear lack of understanding of a character and their subpar writing skills making it impossible to create a proper interaction that is factually accurate for Talzin. No one would take a 5-year-old seriously, less so in star wars. this is plot armour at its finest. The character design overall is two stars, nothing crazy. world background I gave full stars because the author copy and pastes right from the wiki, so it's very extensive and in-depth, ironic considering how shallow the actual story is. Overall, I would say this has potential when looking at its skeleton. give the outline of this story to a better author who has adequate writing skills and this story could be amazing. A terrible waste, it truly is. This review was more on the authors writing skills and their implementation of ideas and their way of constructing their world than criticising the story itself. I think it has great potential, the ideas are there, it's just wasted. I am happy to discuss this, and I hope this brings awareness to incoming readers to provide them with a realistic expectation for the novel.
2 years ago
34
Deezyman_360
honestly i skipped a lot of the words as it was like going to a class but even after the skips i did they where still talking about one thing just info dump after info dump at first it was cool bit then it all got explaining and explaining even in the "intense" moments they over explained it i only read 10 chapters it might be better later on but good luck getting past the 10
3 years ago
30
Visper667
don't be fooled by the 5 star reviews people, I'm giving 5 stars to the world background because it's Starwars its great and already made.
Other wise this isn't a story it's a wiki copy and paste job with very little character build and story development major events that would get your interest have no story to explain or get into but you only know that it happened, the story is basically the original with pretty much zero butterfly effect from his character and pretty much everyone is blind bats to Ani so he can become OP.
3 years ago
21
Clockwork_Jester
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3 years ago
18
201289201289
It's too tall to the point that his relationship with women is ridiculous, the author seems to be obsessed with turning him into a space marine, and there are some implants that can cause him to lose control and create hidden dangers for himself is nonsense, really anything over two meters begins to be ridiculous instead of intimidating, but hey, the author will know it's his story and if he wants to ruin it, it's up to him, and then that women find him attractive seems ridiculous.
3 years ago
15
IHateDao
this feels like a history book more than a Novel there is only Info dump no action even when he go to a mission there is only its end no mission itself
This story is just a hug info dump from the star wars movies with little to no focus on the main character himself.
2 years ago
9
ShuYme
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3 years ago
9
dog_townlord
I tried to finish it. I really did. I saw that people said it was mostly info dumps but I pushed through the first dozen chapters that were just straight wiki copy/paste.The info dumps were just replaced by tangents. So many tangents. I would read a paragraph or two, maybe up to five then skim 2-5 paragraphs because it was just an unrelated tangent. The time line is unclear once he grows up. it says he was playing nice and slow expanding, but it seemed to all take place with one year.I will say, the time he spent with the Jedi, was written much better. not so many tangets, the story progressed well, and the dialog wasn't great, but it was ok.Once He leaves the Jedi, the story just becomes almost unbearable to continue. The dialog becomes confusing with most people sounding like robots with some sprinkle of "playfulness" mixed in.And so. many. tangents. that most of the time just repeat what an earlier tangent said. But I would say about half of the chapter would be a tangent you could just skip.
i'm crying this is really good... the harem tag terrifies me tho........................................................................................
2.8 Stars... well... the author tries very hard to explain the universe but in most chapters, over 80% of it is an info dump, 15% explains the current situation and the other 5% is dialog. If i wanted to read about the Star Wars LORE, i would check the star wars fandom.
I dont get why people like this. The whole time i have been reading i feel like i have just been reading a wiki copy and paste with no originality
Where did the book go it was great Suchj CC hdhdhdhhdhxhxhxhhxhxgxggxhxhdhhxhxjxjxjjxjxjxhhxgxgxgxgxgxghshehsggzyuqjjahvysjkskjrsscgtfsdcvhyrsc
garbage, there is zero character development and the protagonist presents no major challenges, the harem takes up a good excuse to make it look so good that there is virtually no questioning.
Listen, I don't really like making reviews, because it's time-consuming. But I think it's worth doing every now and then. To start, the introduction to the story, the opener, is rather bland and generic, nothing special, that is not very impactful to the story apart from maybe deterring some potential readers. The writing quality is pretty much non-existent, the author as of chapter 28 is just dumping information, there is almost no dialogue, and when there is, it feels unnatural and just overall poorly executed, clearly highlighting their total lack of basic writing knowledge. The story feels more like a summary of events that transpired rather than actually, well... actually writing a story itself. It feels like a journal with entries telling us what he did instead of actually reading about it in-depth, experiencing it for ourselves so to speak. Overall, writing quality is given a 1 star. That leads me to my next point, the MC has zero depth. no character progression, his aspirations are generic and his actions clearly betray the intentions of the author as he attempts to establish the reasons to build the MC's harem. His quest to build his empire is rather boring and lacks a real reason, meaning well-developed intentions and driving factors to realistically pursue such a path. Stability is not discussed since the story is done. story development, terribly paced, no depth to the story, everything is very poorly executed, and events are skipped over which doesn't allow us to immerse ourselves in the story. It's practically impossibly to actually attach myself to the story because it's too shallow. I have come to the conclusion that the author lacks the ability to actually delve into the story in detail because he doesn't have the necessary imagination and skill to build a functioning world, highlighting the intricacies, expand on his plots and develop characters. Nor does he have the necessary information to develop it in a way that is sensible and correct in terms of lore. The last part is understandable to a certain degree due to all the retcons, and the absurd attention to detail needed to be factually correct making it very daunting. adding this to the author being an amateur in writing creates this novel that culminates in a summary of canonical events with slight changes and a pinch of originality. story development 1 star. character design, MC is bland, nothing special about him at all, his dialogue is incredibly crude and badly done, and his interactions with other characters are inaccurate and unrealistic. An example is his interactions with Mother Talzin, a perfect example to highlight the author's clear lack of understanding of a character and their subpar writing skills making it impossible to create a proper interaction that is factually accurate for Talzin. No one would take a 5-year-old seriously, less so in star wars. this is plot armour at its finest. The character design overall is two stars, nothing crazy. world background I gave full stars because the author copy and pastes right from the wiki, so it's very extensive and in-depth, ironic considering how shallow the actual story is. Overall, I would say this has potential when looking at its skeleton. give the outline of this story to a better author who has adequate writing skills and this story could be amazing. A terrible waste, it truly is. This review was more on the authors writing skills and their implementation of ideas and their way of constructing their world than criticising the story itself. I think it has great potential, the ideas are there, it's just wasted. I am happy to discuss this, and I hope this brings awareness to incoming readers to provide them with a realistic expectation for the novel.
honestly i skipped a lot of the words as it was like going to a class but even after the skips i did they where still talking about one thing just info dump after info dump at first it was cool bit then it all got explaining and explaining even in the "intense" moments they over explained it i only read 10 chapters it might be better later on but good luck getting past the 10
don't be fooled by the 5 star reviews people, I'm giving 5 stars to the world background because it's Starwars its great and already made. Other wise this isn't a story it's a wiki copy and paste job with very little character build and story development major events that would get your interest have no story to explain or get into but you only know that it happened, the story is basically the original with pretty much zero butterfly effect from his character and pretty much everyone is blind bats to Ani so he can become OP.
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It's too tall to the point that his relationship with women is ridiculous, the author seems to be obsessed with turning him into a space marine, and there are some implants that can cause him to lose control and create hidden dangers for himself is nonsense, really anything over two meters begins to be ridiculous instead of intimidating, but hey, the author will know it's his story and if he wants to ruin it, it's up to him, and then that women find him attractive seems ridiculous.
this feels like a history book more than a Novel there is only Info dump no action even when he go to a mission there is only its end no mission itself
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This story is just a hug info dump from the star wars movies with little to no focus on the main character himself.
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I tried to finish it. I really did. I saw that people said it was mostly info dumps but I pushed through the first dozen chapters that were just straight wiki copy/paste.The info dumps were just replaced by tangents. So many tangents. I would read a paragraph or two, maybe up to five then skim 2-5 paragraphs because it was just an unrelated tangent. The time line is unclear once he grows up. it says he was playing nice and slow expanding, but it seemed to all take place with one year.I will say, the time he spent with the Jedi, was written much better. not so many tangets, the story progressed well, and the dialog wasn't great, but it was ok.Once He leaves the Jedi, the story just becomes almost unbearable to continue. The dialog becomes confusing with most people sounding like robots with some sprinkle of "playfulness" mixed in.And so. many. tangents. that most of the time just repeat what an earlier tangent said. But I would say about half of the chapter would be a tangent you could just skip.