Kael Cor: A Vampire's Awakening

There's a problem with the writing. The english itself is fine, but the pacing, focus, and rational are all sub-par. Pacing - There are 3 chapters before the official chapter 1 that are glossaries of terms and information about the world, and this is a definite red flag. 1) This is a terrible way to start a story. I don't want to do homework in order to read a novel for leisure. 2) If this is neccessary to understand the story, then you have failed as a writer. You need to show the audience, not tell them. That's the difference between a story and a textbook. 3) Revealing all these details is a part of storytelling. Dumping them all in the beginning simply means you can't use their revelation to further your story. Discovering things with the MC is one of the joys of reading a book, and now you've robbed us of that experience to some extent. 4) By talking about the X levels of your world and how people struggle to climb them, you not only told us the end point of your story, but informed us that we're going to have to read what is basically the same story X times. Another mystery dead and a promise of an endlessly repetitive story. Focus - You need to trim the fat. Details, such as the fact that the MC came in his pants after his first feeding, either need to be cut out or utilized to further the narrative. I believe you were attempting to show how overwhelming of an experience his first feeding was, but you didn't go into enough detail for this fact to be anything other than a distraction. You basically skimmed through the fact that he was exhausted, breezed through his emotional state, and then described in detail the tent in his pants and the stain from his ejaculation. 1 graphic detail amongst a few brief ones sticks out like a sore thumb, and just because it's about a sexual organ doesn't make your novel more "*****." Rational - "Because the information might put you in danger" is not a constructive reason to deny a amnesiac character information about THEMSELVES. That's basically saying "because the author doesn't want the audience to know." You talk about enemies and danger as if covering your eyes will somehow make them go away. All it does is render the MC helpless to avoid these dangers and force him to stumble face first into them due to ignorance.

I always write a review for all my novels. Why? Well I think its because I love to see my name in big letters. This is a reincarnation novel, but I wrote this to focus on one thing and one thing alone........destiny. Is it something predetermined, or something you make for yourself, Kael Cor is my own way of finding that answer. If I have a destiny, then do I decide what it is, does God?, or something else. My journey to that answer is within the pages of this book, and I want to share it with you. Let's go

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I'm about 20 chapters in as is my limit for every novel on seeing whether i will continue reading it and gauging its overall quality. I'm really liking the mixed genre of the novel and how there are so many possibilities towards growth and development. everything from Sci-fi to magick seems possible. the MC is lamentable at times though, his personality isn't very believable and can seem extremely immature. for being a prisoner he sure is lighthearted... i know he's only suppose to be 19, and that he no longer has his past memories but seeing such child like thoughts coming from him can grow annoying quickly. (is supposed to have regressed but some how knows how to be witty and talk back to the guards? lacks decorum and common sense but remembers non-sense such as actors and short phrases?) i feel like this novel could be a stellar 5 star novel if the author spent more time rereading the work for mistakes (as most of them can be easily found if the extra time was spent) and if the fourth wall wasn't broken at all. this novel really has the opportunity to be phenomenal if the serious undertones wouldn't keep getting disturbed mid flow. you have this novel that talks about the lives of others as if they're nothing and how rape and murder could happen around any corner, then out of no where (insert half remembered words or phrases. insert breaking the fourth wall.) it just completely lessens the overall quality of the novel. if author chose to rewrite this without so much nonsense and fourth wall breaking this could easily make it to the front page for weeks to come. best of luck to the author though, I'll continue to read it for a while longer to see how the author develops everything...

Should harm your A.S.S what a lame reason for not telling him the past. If you know the past they will harm you... who? You can’t know they will harm you..... rly Sorry but this is so off and so stupid.

Let me start with a warning: this novel needs NTR warning (or NTR tag). Beware! Read at your own risk! As for review: This novel is not very consistent. Author tries to mix stuff that doesnt mix well. Really dark stuff (torture, rape, NTR, etc.) mixed together with some immature joke usually ends up awkward. Also characters are very shallow. They just get one superficial characteristic and they act only based on that. You cant find any deeper motivation. Like this guy is cruel, another is greedy, this girl is arogant, etc. Even main character is very shallow. He remembers his past life and has many life experiences and yet he usually acts like a little brat without any care. Also whole world is mumbo jumbo mess that doesnt make much sense. It looks like author didnt put much thought into it when he created it. I dont recommend reading this.

Do you like an mc that get's slapped around and pis*ed on? Well, if so then this is the novel you have been looking for. Do you like an mc that get's slapped around and pis*ed on? Well, if so then this is the novel you have been looking for.

NTR enough said ......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

Netotare, that word should be enough for most readers to know why they shouldn't read this. I was interested in the novel at first, but it started showing signs of NTR, and then it just threw it all out onto us ( within first 50 chapters ). Quite disappointed

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So first off, not my cup of tea so take what I say with a grain of salt... To avoid spoilers, lets just say that this story is missing some tags. Like "Tragedy", "Blackmail", "Betrayal", "Slavery", "Extortion", "Rape" and "Grimdark". Lots of trigger warnings needed. The summary made me think this was going to be a story where the MC gets a "system" or uses "game-like elements" to quickly become OP and face slap the people who made him a vampire and enslaved him but that is not what happens... at least not in the first 50 chapters. I tried to give the story a fair shot; the author himself admits the first 4 chapters are not great and that this is a repost of his first ever story but I got to 50 chapters and had to quit. Its hard to give examples without spoilers but any one of my suggested tags would have been a deal breaker for me normally so I cant reccomend this story. P.S. The MC is also reborn from modern Earth so he makes a lot of references but since the setting is a fantasy world it feels real jarring and destroys any chance of immersion. Usually I dont mind if the reincarnated MC invents pizza or makes an anime joke but in this dark fanatsy setting it feels awkward.

This novel is on the same league as other paid novels with in-depth character, world and background development, if this gets more in to action hopefully, it will be awesome! i suggest give it ago for the next 5 chapters!

Pro: good start. Interesting world Dark feel Cons : forced romance Ntr And the biggest one : the mc Honestly it's more of a personal taste But i can't root for the mc in fact i began To dislike him lol, way too naive and Foolish , similiar to japanese mcs. In conclusion : read with caution, there are a lot of dealbrakers but if you don't mind them it will be a good read.

Wow this novel started out great but absolutely sucks now. Not sure why this is rated so highly, started reading it for the dark grimy mood but turned into a cheesefest with **** comedy. Not for me, and funny how the Author ignores every constructive criticism and only responds to positive ones. Well I doubt the novel changes much but I don’t really want to waste my time reading this. And the is married after 10 chapters lol. What a way to ruin it.