Harry Potter and The Loa's Child

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Grammar is ok but there are some fück ups, story is about loa and voodoo stuff. (I have no idea what this stuff is) Although I do not know much about these things I'm learning about it. This is my 3rd favourite Harry Potter Fan-Fiction. Over all good story with a dash of Voodoo things.

Writers said Mc wouldn't be OP at the beginning and it will take times like normal people.. It took less than 20 chapters. The MC is so annoying, the slang is horrible and the grammar is even worst. English is my second language and even I can't take it anymore. Author trade fast pace chapters for horrible grammar. It is a perfect example of quantity instead of quality. Characters are making weird choices and Mc is just a ruthless *****, not thinking about the repercussion of his action (not that it matters because yeah..plot armor and stuff). All in all it is just a teenager on a Power trip making the world his *****. I feel no attachment for him. I feel like the author should just stop for a while. Go back to the beginning, proofread his work and refine his story. It is not all bad but the bad outweigh the good by a mile.

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Incredibly interesting take on the world of Harry Potter. It also ties into The Originals. Definitely a good read. Also, Mc is Chaotic Neutral. He does not mind doing good deeds, but he is mostly interested in what is best for him and will do what is best for him by any means. This includes crime and dark magic. Definitely does not follow Harry Potter plot.

the novel is very good, as compared to many fanfics which follow original script this one builds the world further and is more creative __________________________________________________________________

It was a good and interesting story... Though I can say that he change many scenes and Hermione change... I think this story will do a great things if it was been read carefully... You will notice many things that doesn't include in the original book of Harry Potter...

Eh? This is good novel! ......................................................................................... Though i really don't know about Voodoo ......................................................................................... .........................................................................................

kinda confusing at times could be way better the author needs an editor but he might have gotten one by now since I'm only on like chapter 40 so yea don't take my word on it in the later chapters because this story just may become ultimate trash so don't read it if you don't want a kinda weird mc who say weird things I personally appreciate everything the mc say because it kind groovy you'll get why I used groovy when u read the book so thankyou for wasting time reading this when u could've been reading the story🖕

Okay I had hopes for this but man I can’t even get past the first few chapters with the writing, I won’t bash because idk if this was your first novel but what dude says grovey every other sentence, who called themselves papa like wtf mate

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It was kinda bad in the beginning and the word groovy really pisses me off but then it fades out and the writing improves the are multiple characters but the author does a wonderful job of developing them as a group while also keeping them separate characters i love this and I really hope it comes back.

I am no Doctor, but reading this, kept Carona away Thanks, cant wait for the new update, is really good read as you read it, you can see how he grown by not saying the magic word lol